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A poem who's title is not yet concrete
I'm thinking about calling it "Draped in Mystique" however. Feel free to respond or critique. I don't mind. :' ) Skin of copper Draped in sheets of gold spun and sewn with intricacy A spin fabric dances as she dances An enchantress Eyes of fire Turn up the heat You start sweating Though you've remained in your seat She's amazing She's ethereal And moves with such skill To call it dancing would be a crime For such grace And movements -with mortal words- cannot be defined edited |
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Also, for a better flow maybe try and break it up into Skin of copper/Draped in sheets/of gold spun and sewn/with intricacy. Quote:
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Overall lovely poem, I can see someone dancing in my mind as I read it. I'm not sure on the name though... your call! |
Ack! Just fix'd the typo. Thanks for that. And merci beaucoup. If you've got any name suggestions feel free to share. |
well you could call it something like.. the entchantress dance. just a suggestion lol :)
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Lol, gratzi. :' ) |
Beautiful work, but the title doesn't fit to me. I think a title like 'Dance of the Temptress' or 'Dance of the Goddess' would better fit. But it's totally your call. :sweat: I'm just throwing out ideas.
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