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IsabelWhitten 10-05-2010 03:49 AM

Untitled Story
 
A man slowly emerged from the cave breathing heavily, and sweating. He looked as if he had been fighting, whether it be the blood dripping from almost every part of his body or the cuts gashing on his chest. He walked over to me; it was taking him all his strength to walk. I rushed over to him urging him not to move, but he was persistent, he reached into the pouch he carried and pulled out a book.
“This is t-the most important task that I-I will ever give you.” He slowly and shakily put the book in my hands. “You must protect this book with y-your life. If not the lives of many more are at stake. T-this book holds all the power you will n-ne-nee” then he collapsed on the ground, dead. Why had those been his last words?

He stopped there deciding not to go any farther tonight, Frak silently lied down and put the book on the side table instantly falling asleep.

Frak woke early in the morning wanting to finish the book, yet work called for him. He went to the waterfall no one was ever there in the morning, so he could take his time bathing.

After bathing he quickly went to his morning work as a pub owner. He had his own built and named by him. The Bard’s Best, he was proud of it and all the money he made. He opened an hour after being there setting up, soon many village peasants started coming in, while he was busy taking everyone’s orders in the corner there were four people huddled together. One was a girl who was leaning over a piece of parchment trying to come up with words to keep her feed.


That's all I have so far, and yes, that is the beginning of my story. I haven't yet worked in the main point, but ya know, criticism criticism, constructive only please. And thank you!
I'll put the rest up once I've gotten some opinions on this first section.


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