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Advice for writing a "character bio"
I'm currently working on a character bio for a roleplay I'm hoping to join--I'm not usually a roleplayer, so I'm hoping for a little bit of advice on my writing and my character bio--does it make sense, is it decently written? Are you confused by anything?
Here is the bio: (I will be updating it as I write more, and make changes, so please be on the lookout!) Kestrel has lived a fairly simple life. Her parents are your typical suburban mom and dad, not really taking an active interest in her or her siblings' (two brothers, one older one younger) lives, but also not really ignoring them either. She had a nice upbringing, a small house with a small front yard. As a child she discovered a gentle power within her--telekinesis. At first she was afraid, stunned, shocked even...but she grew to be both fascinated and ashamed--she'd tried to show her older brother her powers..and he accused her of being crazy, and just trying to mess with his head. After that, she began to hide it and practice only when she was alone with no chance of being caught--her powers were never very strong, but she was still nervous and afraid. She fought with her brothers often, they were always trying to find new ways to torment her. One time they had dragged her to the roof of their high school while she was blindfolded (claiming they had a surprise for her)...Stood her on the edge, pulled the blindfold off, and threatened to push her over the side. Ever since then heights have made her ill...It brings up memories of the abuse they put her through, and of looking over that edge, down to the gravel basketball court, where she'd gotten teased and bullied. She was glad to move out when she did. She started going to college for psychology at the Armitage University. She specifically chose it for the "metaphysics" and herbalism classes--they were unorthodox, but she was fascinated and captivated. She hoped she might not be alone there. She hoped she would find some who she could share her gifts with. Shortly after starting there a few stray cats started following her around. She'd always loved cats, and they always loved her, but she thought it was strange...but soon enough she started bringing them treats and canned tuna and even sooner after one of them began to speak to her...At first she thought she was crazy, but she soon realized that it wasn't her, or the cat, but the bond they had forged in this place of mystery and weirdness. Sadly, she dropped out 2 years into her studies because of a severe bout of depression brought on by the death of her younger brother, and the divorce of her parents shortly following...She wasn't very close to them, and at times hated them, but they were family, and it was hard to watch them fall apart. She moved off the campus, taking more hours at both her part time jobs, and got a nice small place with the 'talking cat' she'd adopted and had affectionately started calling Keryn...an Irish name, meaning "dark" after his dark eyes and darker coat. Not that he was a "black cat" though... his belly was white and grey. Kestrel wanted to go back to school, and soon enough she hoped she would...She wanted to finish her education in psychology with her minors in herbalism and general Metaphysics. |
Seems well-written enough for me, but some people out there - unfortunately - are extremely picky so who knows how THEY might feel about it.
I start hating roleplays when people take it too seriously - (and by too seriously I mean being overly picky about details and such to such a degree that they aren't satisfied with something that is" in my book" a well-made character sheet and they just keep asking for more and more details as if you hadn't given them enough already....*rolls eyes* and yes this has happened to me...) - or worse they don't even give you a chance to follow the rules. It's really immature to kick somebody out when they've only just entered and the only way to read/find the rules is to go right on in - they should give us time to read their rules and then adjust our looks/whatever, profile, background, and actions accordingly....(this is more though for those "dreams" in furcadia that require roleplaying - thankfully other games will take you to the rules first or you have to read the rules already up before you can play....) Good luck! |
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So to answer specific questions: Yes it makes sense, and seems decently written. I'm not all to confused by it, I just had to reread it cause i had skipped over the telekinesis part. haha. But, again, it's just a roleplay with other people. The characters are meant to develop and grow throughout it, depending on where the story ends up taking them. If it was a bio that you were making for a personal story, those tend to be more complicated biographies that are needed. :D |
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