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Alison's Stuff...
Welcome... I am a singer/songwriter... So most of the posts in here are going to be lyrics... Some will be short stories and stuff though... Idk... Thank you for visiting though... I really would love critiques... ---------- My Wings Have Grown Since Yesterday I still can't fly I've found Want to dance right to the stars Feet wouldn't touch the ground I've left to many times to say You know where I am found My head is full of more than me A dragon stares me down Not want me, such a silly thought Check mate, I'm double crowned Drifting on a pirate's ship Yet Still My Wings Have Grown. Twenty Four hours until day break Can be rehearsed again Finding out my soul's to take Mind turning at the bend Freezing out some distant cloud The Martians tuning in For seven years of this bad luck Are slowly rolling in. The sky's to dark to fly tonight When will the day break be? Sunlight shining a breaking path My past following me To shred the ending of who I was You're too easy to replace I'm gone, forgotten, lost the race In life I have no more space. My Wings Won't Move Since Yesterday Drowned by heaviness of tears Forgiven moments aren't complete When you come just too near Falling down the rabbits hole My feet won't stand me right back up I'm leaving on a broken edge of Something satan's swallowed up A row boat in the arctic sea Ice split in two I'm done with jumping off this cliff These Wings Are Useless, How 'Bout You? ---------- If You Had Said {growing instrumental} -You're Not Alone! -To many times, they've all passed you by, No idea, of the tears that you cry. You smile at them, beg-ging for their ear, Just to tell them, your story of fear. -You sit alone, eyes far away. Not to long, till you won't have to stay. The night is com-ing oh to slow, Your heart is begging, yearning to go. -She carried just to mu-uch today, No one has seen her waste a-way. You pass her by with-out a glance, Your life goes by just to-o damn fast. -Now she's gone, her face in your mind. She took the pills, to much at a time. Her arms red and raw, from a blade's deepened scar. She'd be Alive if you had seen more. -All that she needed, for a little hope, Was someone to show her there was an antidote. You saw her once, with tears in her eyes, You should have saved her, but you walked right by. -"You're Not Alone" -"You're Not Alone" -"I am Alone"... |
I wish someone would comment... I posted these lyrics because I want critiques and to see if they are any good... |
Sometimes I lay awake, the silence pressing down on me stealing away slumber, and letting the voices in my head Scream. I open the window behind me. An orchestra of crickets serenade me on the wind. Chirps of little angels drown out the tornado the silence had built. My eyes flutter closed. Darkness encompasses me A force of fear, loneliness I cry out without sound. I waltz with shadows and flip the switch illuminating my room. The clock reads quarter past two, Voices race once again causing a persistent ache An ache which only leaves me with an antidote of Sleep. With exhaustion weighing down my bones I creep down the stairs knowing each creek as a friend or foe. Last step taken I reach out and feel a Familiar Chill. Turning the knob I feel the rush of Calmness. The portal to the night opens. Wind engulfs my body leading me to the towering Maple Tree in which we take the sap of to make syrup for a sweet prize. Reaching out in need a rough, cold surface is felt and grasped. Losing the last of my strength the body that I have cursed slinks to the grass beneath the strong Maple. Above me in the country night stars glisten with freedom and the moon looks down in me placing it's hand in my shoulder reminding me to Live for the Light. To walk from the Dark. Drooping eyes of mine flutter like the shutter of the lens I watched the world exist through. Voices dissipate and the concert of crickets lull me to a slumber. My antidote. |
Kitsune Allisonn: The Literature forum is very slow, just relax. Critique will come in time. Such as now, since I find little problem with your lyrics, though lyrics and poems are not really my thing. I do like them quite a bit, as a matter of fact, you should really keep posting and writing! Practice no matter how good you feel you get over time, you can always find improvements.
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