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Rochiel Silverfire 02-15-2012 08:23 PM

The Wood (Looking for Suggestions on a better title...)
 
Once upon a midnight dreary
As I wandered, weak and weary,
Stopped to make my camp, though leery
Of the creatures dark may hide.

That darkness settled on the wood
As nighttime lifted up her hood
Moon upon the treetops stood
As stars up in the heavens spied.

All at once there came a growling
Of some creature's nighttime prowling.
In the distance, wolves were howling;
Creeping near my fireside.

Yellow eyes in darkness flashed
Red tongue over canines lashed
In the distance, thunder crashed
Night wind through the forest sighed.

Rubbing at my eyes so bleary
Reaching for the blade still near me
No one 'round to help or hear me
Not a place to run or hide.

Bracing for the beast's attack
It's movements, though, I could not track
In courage, now I couldn't lack
For Lady Luck would be my guide.

All at once the beast did spring
Through the air did steel sing
Against its hide my blade did ring
The monster, in its death throes, cried.

The battle over soon enough
The beast's foul life my blade did snuff.
My lungs, they fought for every puff
Of air they from the night wind pried.

And so I lay me down to sleep
Within the forest, dark and deep
And for a moment, I did weep
For the creature that had died...

Dawn's light broke above the trees
The night's wind now a gentle breeze
Rustling softly through the leaves
As if caught in some gentle tide.

So onward towards the light of day
Within these woods, I'll no more stay.
Now that my feet do know the way,
It's forward I shall ride.

Cardinal Biggles 02-16-2012 04:09 AM

A Poe fan, I take it?

Rochiel Silverfire 02-18-2012 05:40 AM

Yes ma'am! I'm glad it came through! I wrote most of it while subbing in an English class, where they were reading the Raven, haha! =^^=;;

neonindian 03-08-2012 07:21 PM

Maybe "Darkness Settled." It's a double meaning and is expressed in the beginning and end of the poem. I'd also shorten the line "As stars up in the heavens spied" to As stars up in heaven spied. It just flows a little better for me. The second last stanza was my favorite, good poem.

Rochiel Silverfire 03-14-2012 06:28 AM

Thank you! I like "Darkness Settled" a lot more.

neonindian 03-14-2012 12:50 PM

:) glad i could help


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