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The Wood (Looking for Suggestions on a better title...)
Once upon a midnight dreary
As I wandered, weak and weary, Stopped to make my camp, though leery Of the creatures dark may hide. That darkness settled on the wood As nighttime lifted up her hood Moon upon the treetops stood As stars up in the heavens spied. All at once there came a growling Of some creature's nighttime prowling. In the distance, wolves were howling; Creeping near my fireside. Yellow eyes in darkness flashed Red tongue over canines lashed In the distance, thunder crashed Night wind through the forest sighed. Rubbing at my eyes so bleary Reaching for the blade still near me No one 'round to help or hear me Not a place to run or hide. Bracing for the beast's attack It's movements, though, I could not track In courage, now I couldn't lack For Lady Luck would be my guide. All at once the beast did spring Through the air did steel sing Against its hide my blade did ring The monster, in its death throes, cried. The battle over soon enough The beast's foul life my blade did snuff. My lungs, they fought for every puff Of air they from the night wind pried. And so I lay me down to sleep Within the forest, dark and deep And for a moment, I did weep For the creature that had died... Dawn's light broke above the trees The night's wind now a gentle breeze Rustling softly through the leaves As if caught in some gentle tide. So onward towards the light of day Within these woods, I'll no more stay. Now that my feet do know the way, It's forward I shall ride. |
A Poe fan, I take it?
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Yes ma'am! I'm glad it came through! I wrote most of it while subbing in an English class, where they were reading the Raven, haha! =^^=;;
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Maybe "Darkness Settled." It's a double meaning and is expressed in the beginning and end of the poem. I'd also shorten the line "As stars up in the heavens spied" to As stars up in heaven spied. It just flows a little better for me. The second last stanza was my favorite, good poem.
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Thank you! I like "Darkness Settled" a lot more.
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:) glad i could help
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