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LadyDesi 08-07-2013 10:29 AM

Love
 
Love is like a rough gem
Unpolished and beautiful at first
Hidden within a hard shell
When time sets in
We learn more and more about the other
Some love starts happy but ends in pain
And some love doesn’t change at all
Still just as much in love as the day it all started
Love can be amazing
It can be sad
But a true love is what we should cherish
Until the day we die

Rose Pearl 08-07-2013 03:29 PM

Good one hun, post more

LadyDesi 08-07-2013 04:50 PM

thank you hunni

i been writing more in dutch lately

The Wandering Poet 08-07-2013 07:23 PM

Quite good ^^

Quote:

Love is like a rough gem
Unpolished and beautiful at first
Hidden within a hard shell
Love this part right here.

LadyDesi 08-07-2013 07:23 PM

and the rest?

The Wandering Poet 08-07-2013 07:33 PM

It's good, though it feels like a different poem a little bit. After those 3 lines the mention of the gem disappears suddenly.

(Tried to word it nicely, as it is still a good poem)

LadyDesi 08-07-2013 07:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by The Wandering Poet (Post 1772091927)
It's good, though it feels like a different poem a little bit. After those 3 lines the mention of the gem disappears suddenly.

(Tried to word it nicely, as it is still a good poem)

yeah i never had love so its guess work for me to what it is and how it would feel and such

The Wandering Poet 08-07-2013 07:46 PM

Well for guessing that's a pretty impressive guess :)

LadyDesi 08-07-2013 07:52 PM

thank you


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