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Amelie 05-18-2007 05:11 PM

The Fog (poem)
 
The Fog

Her silver hair
Twines round
Ancient trees
Her wispy dress
Spread ‘cross
Her delicate form
Her chilled fingers
Wrap the long forsaken moor
Cradling it
Like a child cradles a
Favorite teddy bear
The river bank her pillow
The clouds her silken cover
She sleeps
The fog sleeps

All comments and constructive criticism are welcome.

lazeboi 05-20-2007 03:11 AM

really good, simple though elegant.

Great job.

Amelie 05-20-2007 07:00 PM

Thanks. I really value any comments I get.


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