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just want to see if you like this poem
ummm i am writing a simple poem and just wanted to see if you like
once in heaven lived a angel she was nice and very thoughtful she went to earth and blessed the planet for the love and balance of the elements :oops: i know it sounds weird and written by a novice but i wanted the see what you thought of it. i want to write better so suggestions will be very helpful. |
If this was supposed to rhyme, your rhyme scheme could use some work. Maybe try to broaden your vocabulary a little, to show some depth. And it could stand to be a little longer.
You know, I bet more people would see this if you posted in the Literary Forum. It's down near the bottom of the Forum page. ^_^ |
quite a narrative poem you have there
would you like to add more figurative language to it? what's the message to your poem? |
thanks that was a lot of help. i guess i really need help in vocab. :oops:
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Maybe you should try writing a poem with a different subject.
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sorry if that seemed to harsh. i'm very critical XDD |
Sieriously no offence worst poem I've ever read.
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