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Onoko 06-03-2007 11:00 PM

Violin Violetta ~ A Short Story-Like thing.
 
She spun around in speeding circles,
The sound of the violins rushing through the room,
She spun, she spun, and spun she did,
being a ballerina is what she did.

Her ankles wanted to give in,
but she did not,
so she had spun,
she spun alot.

At day she danced,
at night she pranced,
but everyone seem to forget one fact:

She could tire.

As she did, she had tired,
tired of dancing,
tired of violins,
tired of swollen ankles,
tired of blood and tears,

but just tired of having to dance every,
single,
night.


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This was something of a sort of skit I did for Dance Class. O3O;

Onoko 06-05-2007 12:11 AM

He played in speeding time,
the strings creating a thing of sort:

It was a violin,
was it not,
it would not have a name to call it by.

The music he play,
no,
the music he created,
he has done for five years long.

Whatching her dance,
from dawn to dusk,
day to night,
bright to dark,
he watched her dance.

A secret crush is all that it could be,
for he was just ment to play per fee,
he played at her concerts,
at her gigs,
at the stores,
at the stage,
at the the brisk,
for nothing more.

A crush he had on the tiering girl,
who danced on at night,
in a frenzy of twirls.

A secret like it was,
her determanation was all it took,
for him just to look.

A secret love it was,
For he dreamed of Violetta,
he dreamed of her returning that secret crush,
that crush,
that secret liking,
that secret love.

Sun 06-10-2007 05:34 PM

I like it alot. The best thing is that it all makes sence. If i was to try and do something like this, i'd fail miserably.
Good job!"

Onoko 06-11-2007 10:35 PM

Ah, thank you! ^-^

It was originally just the first part, but then when i fell asleep on my keyboard. o3o;

Morbidly 06-16-2007 05:07 PM

Its most interesting...does she ever discover him, I wonder? xD

paxterra2 06-16-2007 06:40 PM

Fantastic!

You can almost feel the rythm of her heartbeat and motion as you write out the story. I could just visualize the girl dancing and spinning, and could hear the violins.

Onoko 06-18-2007 01:31 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Morbidly
Its most interesting...does she ever discover him, I wonder? xD

Haven't wrote it that far yet, but I'll probly will... when,, I don't know, but I know I will when I hear my muusical muse live in the Family Value Tour. o3o;

mekado 06-18-2007 04:06 AM

I love it. Wonderful work.

Onoko 07-03-2007 10:38 PM

Thank you guys. ^-^

Currently working on part three . . .


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