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The living book 10-14-2007 07:36 PM

Ok...I finished proglugue...Now what?
 
I don't know where to start from here:

“Open the gate, sensei” Said a woman, carrying and infant.
“But with her?” The man spoke back, with concern.
“I know what I’m doing!” She snapped. “I’ve been here before, their nothing! Or at least compared to me!”
The Old man sighed. “But they are not the same, not since you were last here.” He looked down at the child. “You maybe strong, but what about her?”
“What about her?!?!” She glared at the child. She could barely stand it, looking at the child disgusted her. She wished it would just die. But it refuses, instead it just stares blankly at her, cooing.
“Look sensei, I know since what happen to your own daughter, you don’t want that to happen to her. But you have to understand, she should of never been born here from the start. Do you not remember who I am? She already has the fate written in her palm, she is destined to a life of hatred and solitude. I am only trying to free her of the life she doesn’t deserve.”
“But that’s so cruel, you would just kill her?” He kept staring at the child. “I taught you of the art’s of a ninja, to protect. And for you to even think about killing innocent lives--”
“Cruel?! Ha! I don’t think a ninja should be talking of such nonsense! I know we protect. But to protect we also have to kill, and us ninja’s need not have emotions. You should know that you old wind-ba--”

The Old man thrusts his fist into her torso. Making her fall back a bit. She was shocked, but snickered.
“Bold move, old man. Such a shame I have to kill you now. But first.” She takes a breath and jumps in the air, keeping her hand near her gut. “ Hmph, your such a nuisance old man. Here, take it! But she is up to you now.” She throws the baby with force towards the old man and disappears.


I dun know how to make chapter one, where should I start, at like as a child, as a teenager, what should I do now. T_T Also, how is it so far?

Huggles 10-14-2007 07:39 PM

The prologue is kinda confusing , because , there only talking.

The living book 10-14-2007 07:41 PM

Hmm...So maybe should add things like about the setting or just movements or something? I never thought of that,-feels so dumb- xP

StormRose 10-14-2007 11:46 PM

Try telling yourself that for every line of dialogue, there has to be a line of none dialogue text as well. That's what I did when my writing became more dialogue than anything else. Soemtimes, a liine of text will turn to more.

There ought to be more details you can plug in to space out your dialogue.

From here, it'd be a good tiem to skip ahead to a time, to the age when your girl will be, most of the story. like if she's goign to be 17, skip ahead to then

You can cover the time skipped with her thoughts, her memories through the course of the story


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