Ok, so I edited my story, and now...
 

It is more eye friendly, like less speaking. It's a bit longer though. It's just the prologue.

“Open the gate, sensei.” Said a woman, carrying and infant. Her braided locks blew into the wind, covering her saddened face and purple eyes.
“But with her?” The man spoke back, with concern. His eyes stood into hers, and gazed into the child. He saw the innocent gaze and sighed in despair, remembering his own child.
“I know what I’m doing!” She snapped. She was shaking a bit, not wanting to face the old man, quickly turning her face out of guilt. Looking into the forgiving sky in a hope of escape. “I’ve been here before, their nothing but a bunch of cowards. Or at least compared to me, thanks to your teachings.” She said in a calm tone.
The Old man sighed.
“But they are not the same, not since you were last here.” He felt anger well up inside him, he didn’t understand the point of this. “You maybe strong, but what about her?” He shifted his attention back to the child. What could she possibly thinking, taking her here, has she gone mad?
“What about her?!?!” She glared at the child. She could barely stand it, looking at the child disgusted her. Her little black curls and innocence made her guilty, and shameful. She wished it would just die. But it refuses; instead it just stares blankly at her, cooing.
“Look sensei, I know since what happen to your own daughter, you don’t want that to happen to her. But you have to understand, she should of never been born here from the start. Do you not remember who I am? She already has the fate written in her palm, she is destined to a life of hatred and solitude. I am only trying to free her of the life she doesn’t deserve.” She paused; she took a deep breath, refusing to look at the child any longer. She was getting mad, she felt the evil inside her start to take over, the curse was making its path towards her. She knew what would happen, but the old man did not see it.
“But that’s so indecent, you would just kill her?” He could not believe what he was hearing, is she for real? Is this the child he taught so long ago? “I taught you of the art’s of a ninja, to protect. And for you to even think about killing innocent lives--” His words were dispersed with another laugh, it sounded more cruel then he has ever heard her.
“Cruel?! Ha! I don’t think a ninja should be talking of such nonsense!” She laughed at his words, how pathetic he sounded.“ I know we protect. But to protect we also have to kill, and us ninja’s need not have emotions. You should know that you old wind-ba--”

The Old man thrusts his fist into her torso. Who was this woman, what happened to her for her to become this way? He did not know, but whatever it was, he was not happy. She fell back a bit. She was shocked, but snickered.
“Bold move, old man. Such a shame I have to kill you. But not yet, I will wait for the right time, till then--” She took a breath and jumped in the air, keeping her hand near her gut. “ Hmph, your not even worth my time old man. Here, take it! But she is up to you now.” She threw the baby with force towards the old man. “You don’t know what you’re getting yourself into, nor do I care.” She took a last glance and started to get a little sadder. But quickly washed off the feeling, and without another word, disappeared in a time warp.

Well...Any idea's? I also need help on how I should start the first chapter. >.>