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-wingless; Madoneko's poetry thread
Wingless;
Madoneko's poetry thread Words made up her silver wings Blue kisses trailed her sky She was always looking up Wanting; wishing she could fly~ Hello! This is my poetry/drabble thread~ Criticism is absolutely welcome, you can post here, but I'd rather you message me. <3 And comments and messages are always loved. :] There are five statuses for my poetry In progress * For Contest Altering Done Writing Finished/old** *no criticism please I like to have the major part done before I get criticism~ **also no criticism please Comments are fine but these are the poems I've put up for you to read. I'm finished with them. If it's green coloured I really need crit! I'm so competitive...xD Hope yo enjoy reading them! Not wanting to spread her wings though The black ink burned her words So afraid to fall, she still risked it all And flew upwards; going golden with the birds. poetry in this post Wingless |
:: takes first post::
Hey Madoneko! How are you doing? |
Nuuuuu! owo
XD Hello! Good thank you! <3 You? :] -just looking for another poem to post- x3 |
When God Blinks
Poem Title: When God Blinks Word Count: 160 Theme: Anti-war Warning: None Dedicated to: People...against war? >.> When God blinks, everything stops. The world temporarily shuts down, and the sky goes dark. His eyelashes brush the ashes off the forests Sweeping, swoosh…swoosh…oh so delicately as to not break them… Softly, they brush over the heads of little ones Whispering them to sleep, swoosh…swoosh… Moving the white sea foam to the stones of the sand Hushing the world to sleep, swoosh…swoosh…swoosh… And then it is closed and the winds drop Lulling, lulling, the breezes sing softly to themselves As they flutter like ghosts over sleeping souls Swoosh…swoosh… This is midnight. Remains of tears rest on God’s eyes like stars Damp like rain, soundless... And then, eyelids flutter, and the lashes curl up. Brushing the dust of the earth up Rising, rustle…rustle… Awaking the world Lifting, lifting, the matter is weightless And only remnants of yesterday’s tears linger in sliver clouds… Rustle…rustle…rustle… This is morning. And it will stay bright, bright and golden Until once again God blinks. |
I'm doing alright; I'm still sick but besides that I don't really have anything to complain about.
Oh, I love that poem of yours! Well, actually I love all your poetry... but you get the idea. xP One of your strongest suits is defiantly imagery. You can blend the images together so well to create the mood, and with this poem in particular I can just close my eyes and see the poem in my mind. >< (<-- poetry junkie) |
Bless those who cry upon stone
Poem Title: Bless those who cry upon stone Word Count: Don't know~ Theme: Being alone Warning: Sadness ;( Dedicated to: Someone I wish would tell me I matter D: Bless those who cry upon stone Who wish upon souls Searching for home Bless those who have lost their heart Who cannot warm Their every part Bless those who weep at noon For their loved ones To come home soon Bless those who have loved ones gone And they can't forget A single wrong Bless those who can only keep Who suffer through life Their secrets too deep Bless those who cry upon stone Who wish upon souls Searching for home. |
@Nariko
Thank you! ^____^ |
Wow... that poem is sad. ;(
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T^T Yeah
I need to upload a happy one. Hm. |
Okay, I lied. ;P
But I like this one. I think I'm almost done, but it doesn't sound quite right yet. ^___^; Let Go Poem Title:Let Go Word Count: 200-ish Theme: Pain Warning: None Dedicated to: ..hm. Weakened porcelain strings attached to every ounce of pain I grasp They’re so difficult to hold up, so breakable, so weak And yet, I can’t stop gripping onto those strings As if I would fall apart at the drop of a single ceramic thread Let go, she whispered, you have to let go I can’t, tears falling again, and they won’t stop My heart is pouring out like a waterfall of endless emotion It’s crazy and it’s so much energy to with stain, I’m trembling And yet I won’t drop a single thread Not yet, I can’t, not now, no please, not now, not now I just don’t want him to hate me, no, he can’t Not yet, not yet, I can’t stop crying now She’s calling now, not now, not now, I tell her to stop, so frantically, so pathetically Then I hear him, she’s brought him to see my shattered mess She’s brought him so he can see my splintered heart He whispers too, I strain to hear, holding on and falling too No more tears, he whispers, you don't need it I don’t, not now, not now, I don’t need it Dropping those porcelain threads I let go. |
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