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kumi's critque
im just randomly putting down poems i have randomly written and anybody else can down there also
A song of life I am inspiration Leaping, from page to page Expressing all emotions, Happy, sad, angry, and more, Made from rhythm and rhyme, A dance of song Like a living, breathing thing Changing, evolving over the years To new sounds I am inspiration |
i like the poem overall, but the emotions part seems a bit out of place. i mean, you can find a better way of saying "and more".
but still, its pretty! |
thx for the advice ^_^ ill work on it
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