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Need help choosing
I have two story ideas and I cannot figure which to focus on. I do not want to do two stories at the same time because I think that would be too much work so I think focusing on one would be my best bet. So I am going to type up a summary of each story and I would like some feedback as to which one I should work on
First: This story begins with twin princes.They are very bratty and believe themselves to be better then everyone else. They believe that as princes they should be able to do whatever they want whenever they want; no questions ask. Their father fearing that they will grow into tyrants decides it is time they learn a lesson. So he sends them to work for a local farmer for a week. Hoping it will teach the humility and ensure they grow into wise and fair rulers. However the princes will not have this. Once they get to the farm they decide to sneak off into the forest. They decide they will stay in there until they are sure their father is good and worried. Then they will come out and surely their father will be so happy to have them back the will not work. However some bandits see them for who they are and attack them. They take whatever the princes have on them and kill one. The remaining prince is overcome with grief and does not know what to do. He cannot bring himself to leave his brothers body so he stays beside it weeping. During the cold night he wishes for a way to bring back his brother. In a strong gust of wind a woman with a large wooden carriage appears. The carriage is pulled by two pitch black horses with glowing eyes. The woman herself has skin the color of honey and bright gold eyes. She steps off the carriage and goes to the scared prince asking him if he did mean his wish and he eagerly tells he did. Smiling she tells him that she could grant his wish. but it will cost him. She tells him that he will have to pay a great price for his brother's life and also complete a task in order to fulfill the wish. He tells her that he would do anything for his brother no matter what they cost. She produces a parchment and tells him that he must sign it and then they will have a deal. Pricking his thumb he signs it with not hesitation he does not even read it over. Once it is signed it disappears. The witch then goes to explain him the circumstances of the deal. She shall bring back his brother but for a time he will not be fully alive. In fact he will need a supply of fresh blood and flesh every night to keep him alive and his skin will be sensitive to light. He will take on a grayish color and his eyes will be clouded over. He will become the living dead. The longer he goes on the more dead like he will appear. Secondly the living prince will be cursed. His left pinky has become black as night and soon his whole body will be swallowed by it. He will become a shadow creature in time and will be forced to live among the other creatures of dark down in the nether worlds. However, if they should be able to retrieve a very powerful stone for the woman then not only will the dead brother be fully restored to life. But the cursed brother will no longer be cursed. They will be returned to normal and allowed to go back to their normal lives. There are also rules. They are never allowed to tell people who they are, they must take on new names and personas. They are never to tell anyone what they must do. They can not go back to their kingdom until they retrieve the stone. They can never tell anyone about the witch. And lastly they must do this all within a years time before the two moons align and the sun eclipses them. The story would follow the twins and their adventure for the stone. This will have a medieval fantasy feel. The princes are elven. The second story: This story is about a girl who as a small child was orphaned. She was taken in by a local mechanic and has been raised as his apprentice ever since. She loves working on airships but she always dreams of something more. She wants to become a captain and sail the open skies. She wants to visit other planets and discover new routes. However her caretaker tells her to forget such dreams and focus on her reality. Mechanics just don't grow up and become captains. He tells her that daydreams are nice things to have but not when they hold you back from living a normal life. She is resentful to him for this but eventually she does forget about her day dreams. Then one day the old man comes home with a terrible wound. He tells her that he has been hiding much from her... and that now he must ask her something. It turns out many years ago the man had a young son. The child seemed to have the seed of the devil in him for from the moment he was born he caused trouble. One day his son stole one of his best airships and went off to become a very dreaded pirate. He now terrorizes the skies pillaging other ships and wrecking colonies. He tells her that his son has gone too far and kidnapped a young prince from a very special planet. This prince is said to hold the key to a treasure that would give the founder the power to rule the universe. The old man tells the girl she must take the airship he has left and form a crew to save the prince. He tells her that on the airship is a tracking device which will show her where the son is going and that thought the ship is small it is fast. He tells her she is the universes only hope. This story will of coarse follow the girl and her crew in finding the pirate. This will have a more steampunk pirate feel to it. Sorry for any spelling and grammar mistakes I just needed to get that all out. I know the second one is less developed but I just came up with it. SO don't judge on which one is more developed but rather which one you think would make a better story. Thanks for you help in advanced. |
Both of them are very good! I like them- I can never come up with good stories [Dx]
For which one you should write- I think the second one is better than the first one. But maybe that's just because I like pirates more than princes and curses [xP] Anyways, good luck![^^] EDIT: But perhaps you should complicate the second story a bit more? Add more layers to it. |
I definitely like the first one. It seems a lot more original than the second one. ^-^;;
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Your welcome, glad to be of help! [^^]
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I'm partial to the second one. In the end it comes down to which on you have a better feeling for. Write the one you have more ideas for now and come back to the other one later.
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the first one is better in my opinion since it seems you put much more time into typing it up. Good luck ^^
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I really do like both of them. At first I was going to say second, but then I thought about the first one... And I'm just such a sucker for brother to brother interaction. x3 It makes me so happy, but then again, pirates make me happy too... >_>
But it seems like you have a better feel for the first one, judging by the length of the summaries. If that's the one you're leaning towards, I say go with that one. ...but the second one would be cool too. x3 *is totally not helping with her indecisiveness* <_< |
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