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stabler12 06-18-2008 12:38 AM

Dreeaming
 
Dreamig
Floating here in space
I dream
I dream
of you
yes you
dreaming
just us together




Help I can't finish. Help me finish please and tell me what you think.

Penny 06-18-2008 07:23 AM

There's a contridiction here that you could explore. The fact that the narrator figure is "floating in space" which implies emptiness, but it's "just us here together".
There's a possible direction with that. One could experiment with some one who is very much alone but pretending, through a poem that there's somewhere in this empty space. That's where I'd go anyway.

stabler12 06-19-2008 02:06 AM

Sounds good.

Penny 06-20-2008 11:06 AM

Groovy! I like being helpful.
Post when your done?


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