I understand what you are saying, and rest assured that I did not intend to godmode. What I figured was, based on my own experience and best guesses, that the first thing he would do was copy down all known information on her and then his own insights, then exrapolate from that based on the 5 in both intelligence and wit I assigned my character. Since this is apparently not the case I will go back and edit, but be aware that that might take me a while since I am just heading for bed. As for waiting on him to say exactly what he put there I apologize, I was just trying to move the thread along at a decent pace. Again, it will be remedied. As for the question of the stereo, I refer to my computer and it's speakers AS a stereo as do my friends since it can play music quite loudly. I don't know why a stereo is in a library, I'm pretty sure a supervisor would have noticed that, but whatever, I'll work around it. As for the revisions themselves that may take me a while as I was literally starting to shut things down for the night when I noticed the post, and I have a lot of classes and things to do afterwards tommorow, but I will fix it according to what was laid out here.

Thank you very much, Firemare, and thank you for being so mature about it. I really appreciate it. Just be sure to ask, rather than assume, in the future please. It saves so much grief. Don't worry so much about the pace of the game, it will proceed at whatever pace it needs to on its own. I'm more concerned about quality than speed.

In regards to the amendments, please do so at your earliest convenience. And Tykonaughtica, please be sure to adjust your post accordingly after the changes are made to Firemare's. I don't want to make a habit out of this, however, so in the future let's take a bit more care about what we write and what we assume. Thank you both very much.

Since we'll be waiting for posts to be fixed, I would ask that neither Firemare, nor Tykonaughtica proceed any further in the game until the situation is all situated. Anyone in the same area as they are with any interaction with either character should also consider themselves on "pause". Everyone else, resume as normal, just avoid the library until things are resolved. Thank you all for your patience.

@Kierys: Well I wouldn't say that being a moderator makes me qualified since I'm fairly certain several moderators have never RPed before. XD We don't moderate the quality of RPs, rather, we just look to see if the post abides by site rules. I'm not even a moderator technically since I'm on the event/storyline team.

That being said, I am familiar with literate standards. Although I prefer semi-literate myself since it feels a little less stifling. :yes: I like to think I include enough words to get my ideas across. I merely made that comment because I generally don't include many superfluous details that are common to advanced literate RPs. More succinct rather than long-winded, unless the moment calls for it.

Ferra: My apologies, I thought that moderators might be versed in the rules of all the forums. Not being a mod myself, I wouldn't know for sure. Please excuse my assumptions. But I will be asking for a sample of your writing anyways before approving anything, so we will have to see then. I don't foresee a problem. ^-^ I made this thread Literate to Advanced to impress upon those joining that this is a little stricter about grammar, spelling, and whatnot. A good story deserves dedication, and with too lax of an atmosphere, I'm afraid that some of the quality would be lost. With a story like this, I don't want casual interaction. This is something that requires a certain level of seriousness. But fun should always be had. That, after all, is the point. I believe we can achieve both, all while weaving an incredible tale.

In case you couldn't tell, I am very passionate about my stories/games.

No worries. XD I didn't expect you to know what moderators are responsible for, I was just musing.

I used to cringe at spelling errors and grammar issues, but after reading over my own posts, I realized that I make huge mistakes all the time. (I do take more care when I type RP posts, however, rest assured.) Now that I've nearly completed my schooling to teach non-native English speakers, spelling and grammatical errors really don't phase me unless it's so bad I can't understand the intended meaning. :lol:

But I agree with you and I definitely appreciate that you want to hold the RP to a standard. It's a valuable asset for an RP to have a mindful GM.

For the writing sample, what sort of composition are you looking for? I have a lengthy intro post I wrote for an RP (as a contest submission actually) several years back. Unfortunately most of my recent RPs have been in private guilds, but I'm sure I could dig up other links.

Something more recent would be more appropriate, so I think the most convenient would be for you to write up whatever you would use as a first post. If I accept your profile and approve your sample, then you could go ahead and post that for your first, no muss, no fuss. It also lets me see how you would react to the other characters, if there were any around to react to. I hope that clears up any questions you might have. If you have further inquiries, feel free to post them here or, if they are of a more personal matter, pm me. I will be logging out for the night now, however, so it may take a bit for me to respond. I will try to be back on to check up on things before I work tomorrow.

Alright, sounds reasonable. Although the more I think about my up-coming fall quarter, the more apprehensive I am about adding yet another RP to my repertoire. XD But if I do have more questions or end up making a submission, I'll definitely be back. Thank you!

First adjustment made. I'll wait for Tycho's response to fix the next one. Bleh, if I mess up again tell me because I got sick and am dealing with that and class right now so I may not be at my most coherent.

I will try to let you know, but it's probably best for you, Firemare, to wait until you're feeling a bit better before you post. The point isn't to make as many posts as you can, it's to make quality posts to create a quality story. If you don't feel you can do that while you are sick, then don't post. The other characters will find something to do until you are well again.

I'm not horrible, just not at my best. I wouldn't be posting but it isn't fair that it's on pause because of my actions. As it is my stomach ache will not stop me, but thank you for your concern.

The Facts
Name:Saito Ikari
Counterpart:
Username:Yue Amaris
Class: Dreamer
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Age: 24

Attributes
Strength: 2
Dexterity: 4
Stamina: 3
Charisma: 3
Manipulation: 3
Appearance: 2
Perception: 3
Intelligence: 2
Wits: 3

About You
Past/Bio: Saito's life has never been really special. He was born in Japan, moved to America when he was ten years old after an accident killed his parents. The only living family he had left lived in America, so he didn't really have a choice. After he was done with High school he followed a study in Japanese, concentrating on culture and language. Though after he finished, he found himself in serious lack of money and since he had already moved out of his parents house, he seriously needed a job. At the moment he works at the local animal shelter and he's trying to get a job as a Japanese/English tolk
Personality: Saito is a bit of laid back person. He's nice to people as long as they are nice to him, though sometimes he's a little to nice for his own good. His laid back attitude has often got him into trouble during his school days, but he had always managed to talk his way out of things. Further more he enjoys a good joke now and then and can be really sarcastic at times. Around the girls he's really shy and he's horrible at flirting.
Description: http://fc03.deviantart.com/fs6/f/200...by_Akai_01.jpg

The Keys
Desire: 5; Saito just wants to achieve something in his life. Up until now he hasn't really done anything special with his life and all he wants, is to be able to look back on his life and say that he has at least done one thing he can be really proud of.
Reality: 5

((well hope this is okay. Tell me if I forgot something or if I need to change something ^^))

Firemare: Maybe not fair, but until the posts have been remedied, there is no help for it. We need to resolve this situation first before we can move forward anyways. And if we have to wait for you to feel better before we progress, then that's something we will do. Because you're going to get sick, and so are other people. We're going to work, we're going to make appointments, we're going to have other things to do. We are not always going to have everyone here, all of the time. So we have to adjust and just get use to it. As long as you post once every 1-3 days, then you have nothing to worry about, Firemare.

Yue Amaris: Overall the character looks okay, but I have a few questions and requests.
Your character has a 4 in dexterity, but it doesn't say why in your bio or your personality. Please explain what your character does that makes him so dexterous. For example, someone who is good at dancing could have a 4 either through natural ability or lots and lots of practice.
Also, what is a tolk? I am unfamiliar with this term, if it isn't a typo. If it is, then you need to go back and fix it. Plus, keep an eye on your punctuation. I suggest always going over your posts at least once before submitting to catch any little mistakes.
For instance, you are missing a period after "tolk", you need an "a" between "of" and "laid" in your first sentence of the "Personality" section, and the "to" between "little" and "nice" needs an extra "o". "Got" should be "gotten", "had" should be "has" when using the tense that you are, and "further more" should be one word. A comma (",") should go after "shy" in the last sentence because it is separating two sentences conjoined with "and".
Sorry if I seem like a terrible nitpick, but I only allow so many mistakes before I start pointing them out. It will be up to you to catch your mistakes and fix them if/when you join the game, as I do have a lot to do and can't scan your posts every time. Making sure your posts meet requirements is your responsibility.
And one last question: What does he want to achieve? "Something" is a rather vague area to explore. What kind of achievement would he really desire? It doesn't have to be specific, but it should be a little more narrowed down than "something".

As soon as you fix up those things, then please post your first reply to the game in this thread, so I can see your style and determine if you would fit in well with this game and the other players.

.....wow didn't think my english was this bad 0.o. Reading this I don't think I'm fit to join, english isn't my first language, though I seriously didn't realize I made so many mistakes. Sorry I used up your time like this, I really did want to join. But seeing this I don't think I will. Good luck with the rp ^^ and maybe I'll drop in now and then to read it.

Yue Amaris: It's not so much about how many mistakes you make, it's about whether you catch them and fix them. Goodness knows, I have pretty good English, but I make dozens of mistakes just typing a couple of lines. So far I've already made seven, but if you fix them as you type, or review your post before you submit it, you can catch them and fix them quickly. But if you don't feel you are up to the standard, then I understand, and I am very sorry that you won't be joining us. But yes, do feel free to pop in and read on what's going on.

Also: As an announcement to the players already in game, the most recent post/amendment was made on the 21st, but most of the rest last posted on the 20th. It is the 23rd now. Please be sure to check in often and meet your post requirement before the end of the night, or I will start sending out warnings. Thank you.

Hey all, I want to say how very sorry I am. This is my first time on this site and I didn't realize that there were multiple pages. Wow do I feel dumb.
Also, I apologize for the issues caused by my lack of description, like Kierys pointed out I'm a good RPer, but I usually do it in real life XD
So, please forgive me, and I will go back and fix my posts accordingly, then continue on the posts. Thank you so much for the information, and dont be afraid to PM me whenever you want, because I love creative criticism, its really helpful. Im out for the night but Ill try to post when I get back, and I will definitely post by tomorrow.
This won't happen again.
HAVE A GOOD NIGHT!!!

I posted in the game to give our other player something to work with while we wait (holy alliteration, batman!) for the amendments to take place. Thank you, everyone, for your patience, I believe we'll have this moving again in no time. Also, if you know of anyone who you think would fit well into this game, please direct them this way. We could use a couple more players to diversify things.

Tycho thank you for being a good rper, as for myself I made some stupid mistakes as well (Curse you stereo!) so it's good to see that we can both move beyond them easily. That said we have FINALLY moved beyond the editing stage, therefore I have brought internet cookies for everyone in celebration! *reveals platter of internet cookies* May the thread live long and prosper!

Holy crap, I just had a gamergasm!!!!!
Internet cookies and Vulkan phrasing?!?!?! What is this little piece of heaven?

Um... Me being an uber nerd with an umlaut? O.o I'm just like that. On an unrelated side note, why is the first thing you bought for your character SOCKS?

Socks are important, lest we stray into Amish pron. *Inside joke*

Hahaha, because I can't find any clothing that I can afford. Everything is SO expensive.

Yay for Amish pron!!!!!

Hey yall, you still alive? I am addicted to this game and have been checking it at least 3x a day since I last posted. Where are you? My skin is starting to itch and I feel really thirsty!

BTW, that was a withdrawal joke . . . Yeah.

OMG!!!! My Demon book just came in the mail and the postman was hella-hot!

Sorry. I unexpectedly had to work yesterday (As you probably noticed, thanks for visiting me!), so I didn't have much chance to get on and reply. I'll go do that now and send out some reminders. Also, should we move the requirement to 1-4 days, since that seems to be the stretch of time that people reply in, or do we all feel we can make the every three day requirement? I'm just curious, I want my players to be comfortable, but I also want them to adhere to the rules. Please let me know as soon as possible.

Honestly I was pausing to allow your character to come in and join us, then I got the Flu. On the brightside, I'm now quarantined, so I'll have lots of time to post...

She'll come in good time, don't worry. You don't need to make openings for me, I'll find my own ways. Just be concerned with your character and whomever they are talking to. ^-^ Oh, also, Tyko, double posts are not allowed here. Be sure to go read the Terms of Service and the Rules, located on your taskbar in the upper right-hand corner. Whenever you need to add to something you have said before but nobody has posted after you, then simply edit the post with the "Edit" button, on the lower right-hand corner of the post in question. ^-^ And I'm jealous. Our postman is always a woman and she looks like she would gut any person to hit on her.

Edit: Also, Firemare, be sure to be watching your paragraphs. Every time your character says something, it should be the start of a new paragraph, unless it is proceeded by text and separated by a comma. Think of the period and " as being new paragraphs. If a block of text ends in a period, and someone says something right after, whatever they said should be a new paragraph. Also, if something is said, but then followed by text, if there is a period at the end of the speech, then the actions to follow should be a start of a new paragraph. For example:

Carmen fled through the narrow pathways of the bookcases, stumbling over her feet as the terror gripped her heart and squeezed. Her breath was coming in short bursts, and her vision was blurred by the tears streaming down her face. She stumbled and fell over a discarded book, and she crashed into the floor with a deafening sound like trees falling in the woods. Sobbing, she tried to pick herself up or drag herself forward, but she heard the heavy footfalls of her pursuer just behind her. She let out a despairing cry.

"Please! Please, don't hurt me! I'm sorry, I'm so sorry! Spare me!"

The figure stopped, their visage shadowed by the lack of light provided in these dim passageways. A hand raised, brandishing the weapon of choice, a heavy tome. The voice erupted from the dark figure, a harsh, commanding sound that broke the silence that surrounded them.

"Carmen," he said, giving the book in his hand another shake, "did you think I wouldn't know? That I wouldn't find out?"

"Please," she sobbed, her hands in front of her, defending her face.

He took another step, his boots making heavy sounds that echoed off the bookcases and into the air, which seemed to hang in anticipation. He was at her feet now, where he stopped, his lips parted to say, "You...will be fined twenty five dollars for the damage of this book. Furthermore, I want a written apology for the misuse of this library's resources, and I will be writing to your father."

The stern face of the librarian pulled away from the shadows and looked down upon the girl with a frown of disapproval at the way she carried on. He tucked the ruined book under his arm and turned away, the sound of her crying becoming only whispers of noise.

"Nooooooo!"

Her death wail echoed in the air and disappeared into silence.