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Old 11-17-2007, 02:00 AM

So...I got this idea from something that is actually going on in real life at the medical center in my town. It's a scary thing...but thankfully, not as bad as it may sound. I've turned up the danger by about 500 points for the sake of making this exciting.

What I have so far:

The patient death rate at a military hospital in Colorado is alarmingly high. One reason for this is that most of their doctors are more or less incompetent. Every time they get a good doctor in, he or she ends up leaving, getting fired, or worse, getting killed within a month. The record for keeping a single good doctor around was 2 1/2 months. Another reason is that the record keeping is just as bad, if not worse. Medication mix-ups are all too common, and they've even mixed up surgeries. At least twice, organ transplants were given to patients who did not need them. The fate of a good record manager is always the same as that of a good doctor. Injured soldiers have sometimes found that they would have been better off taking care of themselves than coming to this place.

One day, a very sharp records manager came in to work for a while. She noticed something amazingly strange...and disturbing. Every month, companies and individuals donated millions of dollars to a "hospital improvement fund"...but most of it was disappearing into thin air. In fact, most people on the inside didn't even know this "hospital improvement fund" even existed. The moment she found out about this, she began investigating, taking extra care to make sure everything related was put back exactly as she found it. One day, she had nearly reached the root of the problem. A few more hours, and she probably could have found the person who had been stealing all of this money and turned him or her over to the police. Suddenly, her replacement for the night came in as her shift was ending. This was odd; he was usually at least 10 minutes late. He rushed her home, telling her not to worry about putting everything away; she had been "working too hard." She protested, saying that she wanted to take care of it so that he would have a clean area to work. However, she eventually gave in, not wanting to show that there was anything she didn't want anyone to know she was reading. She thought she had hidden all that needed to be hidden while she was talking, anyway.

Ten minutes later, a medical supply delivery truck sped through a red light at 103 miles per hour and slammed into her car, killing her almost instantly.

Sadly, she had fully expected something like this to happen eventually from the start. For this reason, she had made sure to keep records of her own findings. Problem is, because it was neither safe nor helpful to keep them in any easily comprehendable form, no one but her could really understand them. The most obvious of the instructions she left behind were the words "play stupid," written in her blood on the pavement where her car crashed. Other items left at the hospital, which may or may not have meant anything, were a journal page, a marked-up cookbook, and a CD of old favorite songs. More will probably be found if anyone can get into her house.

So what I need help with is this:

Coming up with names and constructing the clues to match - I would appreciate if any help with this would be through PMs, for obvious reasons.
Filling out the story a little better.
And if you could just tell me anything I could change to improve it, that would be great. D:

Would anyone be interested in joining something like this?

 


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