>_> I liked the sketches more than the manga pages. why? Because in the sketches your lines vary in depth, and in the manga all lines are in one width and there are no shading or colors :/ what is more I find the speech bubble outlines and the litters inside of them a bit too heavy - it should look that there is more ink in them, than in rest of the drawing ;D Both of these things makes the manga pages to look a bit dull.

But your anatomy skills are great and the character Shine looks very original and interesting - good enough for a real selling manga :D