I must say, you have quite the command of language, and I quite enjoy the way you seem to know just where to set a break and how throw opposites together in such a way as to create a complete picture of something, to express the ambiguity of human emotion. Beyond that, the rhythm and tone of a number of these poems, and the layering of meanings and emotions is impressive, to say the very least.

However, I do believe that the first of them falls flat in comparison to many of the others. It seems entirely too convoluted, as though in expressing the idea in images you have somehow managed to lose sight of what you were expressing in the first place. That is to say that the images seem to have taken over.

As it is, my favorites would have to be "Tone" and the majority of the love song series (with the exception of the second one, which seems somehow uncreatively cliche and dull beside the others).