Seradinea: Oh, I really have no idea, hahahahaha! I'm terrible with tunes, so I usually have someone else come up with that part for me (terrible, right?). But I was hoping for a more mellow rock melody. Kind of like Band Of Skulls. :) Did you think this sounded like a certain kind of genre?

Projectwolfie: Yeah, that's probably true. I thought that posting lyrics here was a little more popular and I'd get more results, but I guess that isn't the case, hahahahahah :)
Mm, you're completely right. It's sort of flat, thought I really like the rhymes in it. Thanks for pointing that out to me, I wouldn't have noticed otherwise :)
Do you think this would work:
I have seen you get hurt
I've seen you become broken
And I know I did it first
But your heart to me was always open
I think it ties the story in the first stanza back into the song, because it was lost a little in the second stanza.