01-25-2012, 03:38 AM
This is the first chapter, and I'm already looking forward to seeing more! :D
I loved how you described the Doctor's surroundings. You painted quite the picture with your words. What really piques my curiosity is the 'sign'. It raises quite a lot of questions for me, and I hope that you'll post more so I can find out more about this mysterious brand.
Your story has no obvious spelling or grammatical errors, which is a big plus. The paragraphs are spaced well, too. There's nothing worse than seeing a story all squished together. x__x
Overall, your story has a huge amount of potential. I do look forward to seeing more! =3
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