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Ancasta
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06-12-2008, 07:54 AM
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Originally Posted by fallpanicclick_lover
At home I went and took a nap. I hadn’t been sleeping well for the past few days. As I slept I dreamed of nothing other than falling off of cliffs. I had been having a lot of these dreams of me dying. I didn’t even tell anyone. I mean what was I suppose to say? ‘Ohm, hello unnamed doctor, I’ve been having a lot of these dreams in which I die. Is that normal?’ Yeah I’m just waiting for that to happen.
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Well, for starters you might want to use supposed instead of suppose.
Another thing is that you might want to go into more detail. Ok, she's dreaming about falling off cliffs and dying. Does she know how she got to the cliff in her dream? How does she feel when she's falling? At what point in the dream does she wake up? How does she feel when she wakes up? How tired is this lack of sleep making her?
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