Here is the second part of my first story. Please tell me your opinion. I'm always looking for ways to improve my art.

Ancient Fury: Breaking The Seal

Scene 1: The Race

“Blast it They’ve got the Phoenix. And I’ve lost sight of the Thunderbird. He was heading south, but where to?” Just then, Thanatos stared at the dying Manticore. “Hey, you. Tell me, where is that living thunderstorm going?”
“He is going to our base to complete the ritual and release our master. The last day of humanity is at hand. He will be revived and you all shall become nothing more than his pet. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA ” it was at that point that Thanatos reached forward and ripped the Manticore’s jaw off of its face with a spray of blood.
“I’ve had enough of you and your mouth. Die Foul Beast ” He then ripped the beast’s head off of its shoulder and walked away as the body lay in its own blood and quickly turns to dust. “I have to save that kid and the others that they have taken. But if I go now they will releases his spirit before I get there. I can still stop them though if I destroy the body they wont have any where to put his spirit and I will be able to destroy him easily.” he then drew a large circle I the ground and knelt within it. “Ancient spirits of darkness and light, I seek your aid guide me through my plight.” The circle began to glow and a strange glyph appeared below him. It was in the shape of a star made of swords with two dragons circling the exterior. He then silently sought the location of the body of Luce. The answer was revealed to him very quickly. “I’m not surprised. It’s always in one of those three places. I’d better hurry.” As he stood the glyph faded and his wings emerged. They were pitch black with crimson fire shaped markings on the back. “It’ll take me about half a day for me to fly to Egypt. I hope I get there in time.”

Scene 2: A Battle Worthy Of The Gods

Thanatos soon arrived in Egypt. He hovered above the tallest pyramid. “They think these pyramids are just burial grounds for ancient pharaohs. But this one is the original. They built the others to help disguise it. This pyramid is a seal to the body of Luce.” Suddenly the earth begins to shake, and the pyramid begins to crumble. “Blast it They must have released Luce’s spirit. I have to destroy the body now ” Thanatos then draws a circle in the air. The same glyph as before appears. The swords within the glyph merge into one as the dragons form the hilt of the sword. The bade then solidifies and is grabbed by Thanatos. The blade itself looks like a giant fang with flames etched in the sides. The hilt has pair of dragon wings similar Thanatos. He grasped the blade and dove toward the rubble that now revealed Luce’s body. But before he could make the finishing blow, three of the other pyramids began to glow and crumble. In their wake were three great beasts. They were gigantic. The first looked like a human whose skin was made of diamond. The second was a serpent with large black wings. The third was a red metallic dragon.
“What do you think of my creations, Thanatos?” Thanatos turned and saw a hooded figure suspended in the air. His aura was a mix of blood and darkness. “They are ingenious creations don’t you think. After I destroyed the gods, I used their immortal bodies to make these creatures. They are still as lively as the day I crafted them.”
“You can’t be? ”
“My beasts, eradicate this traitor.” The creatures then attacked. Thanatos went higher into the air as the serpent and the dragon chased him. The power of their attacks were mind boggling. Every attack caused the earth to shake. Thanatos was barley able to doge, let alone attack. Eventually one of their attacks connected and Thanatos was sent flying into the ground. As he struggled to stand the creatures circled around him and launched an attack toward the center of their ring. As their attacks met they merged and rained own upon Thanatos. He laid there. His body was near it’s limit. Most of the bones in his body were broken. He was bleeding everywhere.
“Damn I’ll die at this rate.” He then noticed he was very close to Luce’s body and struggled to get to his feet. “This is really gonna hurt but, if this works I’ll be healed and the body will be destroyed.” He then flew on top of the body and drove his sword into it. “The Seal Of Reflection ” the creatures circled and attacked again. Thanatos screamed in pain from the blast. His seal reflected the blast back to the creatures. Their bodies weren’t destroyed, but the souls within the were. And the sheer force of the attack eradicated Luce’s body. Thanatos himself was on the verge of death until he grabbed his sword. The sword had managed to retain a colossal amount of energy from the attack. And that energy was used to fully revive him. “I see that your body has been destroyed, Luce. So you can stop any dreams of resurrection that you may have.” he said to the hooded figure.
“Bravo on defeating my creatures. You just saved me five minutes of work removing their souls.” He then raised his hand and the bodies of the creatures disappeared. “I need their soulless corpses to create my new body. You didn’t expect me to return to that relic. Did you?”
“I’ll kill you, Luce ” Luce then removed his cloak, and Thanatos stopped inches away from beheading Luce. “No You didn’t? ” Thanatos saw there in front of him the face of his closest friend.
“Now this is a dilemma. What shall you do? Will you slay your friend and save the world, or will you be selfish and doom the world all for your ridiculous ties of friendship? This body means nothing to me I can always get a replacement. But for you this is a completely different matter. That is why you are a faliure. Your human emotion will always prevent you from doing what needs to be done.” Thanatos then lowered his sword. “I told you this would happen. I bid you farewell.” With that he vanished.
“How can I stop him. I can kill him now but my friends will suffer. How dare he bring them into this I swear I will make him suffer for this.” As he landed on the ground contemplating was his next move, his concentration was broken by three swords piercing his chest. As he turned around to see who his attacker was he was then pelted with a lethal poison mist. “Who do you think you are? ” he screamed as his vision began to blur.
“I am the one who is going to save the earth from you and your master ”
“That voice A female I know her from the past.” He then collapsed, completely at the mercy of his attacker.

To Be Continued ...

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