[u] with tears, but I looked
My heart was soaring; I smiled as
wait here in heaven; waiting for the [u]
Awwwww. Its sad and sweet.
I like how she speaks to the granddaughter as if she’s older.
I would think that would be an extremely tough, and scarring moment in Serena’s life.

The last paragraph: It is unclear to whom the yous refer to. There is God, where the You is capitalized, but there is also Serena, or an unknown source. Indefinite can be helpful, but the rest of the story is definite, so having a clear meaning in the end would be best.