Okay Kilia:,

Sorry this took so long >.< I've been too damn busy XD

What I see first and foremost is that the shape of the shades is better but you use too much of the darker shades at the bottom and yet not darker shades at the top. You use the lightest shade and then that second lightest shade is barely there before you cover it more with the third lightest shade. Try backing off slightly on the two darkest shades at the bottom and see how that looks.

Then try adding a bit of the third darkest shade to the shoulder areas

Wait - I just looked further - in some areas you skipped the third darkest shade and went straight to four and five...don't skip!