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fireprincess
A Dream Is A Wish Your Heart Makes
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06-22-2014, 02:05 PM
Project Mene
Round 1
CampingXLONGCAT: This one was a bit confusing as far as clothing choices and background go. Your background says TROPICAL but your outfit says COOL NIGHTS. I think you could have gone with a tank or shorter sleeved shirt to make it fit. I like the tent.
Maria: Would you be fighting off bugs wearing shorts that short in the woods? I think I'd prefer to see some pants or something on you. I like the mood you created with the tent and the sunset. And the use of the fish on a stick was creative. I wouldn't want to mess up my pretty converse though by going camping D:
Mythos: Well what a nice private camp you've set up for yourself... is this a survivalist camp, I wonder? I think the only comment I have for this is one on composition. Below about the level of your avatar's shoulders everything is lovely and interesting to look at but I really wish there were something to break up what's going on up top. I think you might have done better to use a different item to create the feeling of foresty around you which didn't take away from all of the other lovely colors and things you could have hidden up there.
Seiki Nova: I know that tent is the only one we have on Mene (right?) but it's such a standout piece in your entry. If the bush in Eastriel's entry is too tropical, your tent is straight out of a rainforest. I like where this was going, but I think there are some flaws in there.
Score: 19/30
Round 2
tripX
LONGCAT:
Maria: I have to say, those glasses make you look like a bug alien. D: Once I get past the glasses, I think you look cute. You look like you got ready to go to the beach.
Mythos: Well, well! Someone is on her way to someplace snazzy, isn’t she? She almost looks a bit like a modern Audrey Hepburn with very suntouched hair, doesn’t she? This look is very trendy-50s-beachwear and I dig it. I do wish I had some more idea of where she is off to, though. Is that a plane ticket in her hand and the sandals are for the airport or is she going to go cruising on the love boat (ooOooh~)… Either way it’s cute, not overdone or underdone and the colors are attractive together.
Seiki Nova: Your entry just looks like she wants to get away! I get the feel of a traveler, but the items that you used, especially in the upper half of the outfit, feel a bit bland. Maybe if the colors had been different it would have looked more vacation-y. As it stands the tops kind of blend together and I feel like the sunglasses are really distracting, especially with the weird yellow frames.
Score: 24.7/30
Round 3
beachX
LONGCAT: Sun tunes and fancy umbrella drinks. I want that vacation. Very cute relaxing outfit, i can just imagine one of the hunks from the cheesy romance ci hanging next to you.
Maria: You definitely have a beach vibe going on. I feel as though you could have been a bit more creative in the outfit. Maybe add some sandals or a tattoo to up the creativity. I like the background you created - it's definitely beachy and all the elements fit together nicely.
Mythos: Someone looks like she is ready for a full day of summer fun (without the pain)! I like the bright colors and that nothing seems too crowded with your bits and bobs… I get the impression that your avatar is grinning at a cabana boy—and thanking him for the lemonade! The palm tree poking out from behind the umbrella is kind of weird and you could have done without it, definitely. I enjoy the fact that you used those standard crayon-box colors for your background and focused on using softer colors for your character. It helps her stand out nicely, I think. Again, this isn’t an avatar where a color scheme comment can really be made, but I think you made nice choices in the ones you used to create a scene… I really do like to see a description with avatars and hope that if you do advance you let us in on what you were thinking with your designs!
Seiki Nova: Well she just looks like she's ready to have a ball at the beach! She's found a nice tree to set herself under and she's got her drinks and some sunscreen. Now she's just waiting for her friends to join her for a little beach dance party. The underwear mixing is great.
Score: 31.9/40 - Winner
baseballX
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LONGCAT: Great representation of the chaos under the stands, but could do without the chairs.Not too many chairs under the stands
Maria: not sure about the blue signs. They look randomly placed there. I guess I understand they would have signs to the seats, but the black and blue combo really sticks out. You have a really messy avatar D: In terms of all the food around her LOL. Baseball fans can be extremely messy! SO well done! I think the outfit itself is a bit boring. To me it seems typical and overdone. I would have liked to see you push yourself with the outfit. But the background really works nicely!
Mythos: It looks like someone is having fun at a minor league game (careful with that bottle… you don’t want to have TOO much fun!). Good, bold color selections and the shirt layering is very clever and effective! You get the sense with the food/drink debris that she’s the ‘true’ fan, sticking it out for the extra innings when everyone else has fled for their cars. Very clever and well done. I can’t think of anything I might change on this!
Seiki: Tailgating is the best! The camaraderie and the food are always a good time, and I think you captured that pretty well here. The layering of the shirts is a little odd to me because of the puffy sleeves, but overall your character would fit in well at a baseball game!
Score: 33/40 - Winner
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Final Round
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I always think of carousel horses when I think of carnivals or fairs. They are usually so elegant and decorated, so I tried to incorporate that in my entry.
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CarnivalX
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LONGCAT: There's something disconnected about yours. It has a obvious element, but there's something that screams "doesn't fit". It might be the different intensities of colors in the items. It might actually be the low leg connection on the horse hooves that's throwing me off, a large visible section of white that stands out and is off centered. But your background is busy, you could have done with just one source of music and with those lights a different awning.
Maria: Cute idea to use the carousel as your inspiration. I really really really wish you had used the actual horse legs to get you avatar to look like the horse. I think it would have completed the look. Right now it's just weird that you don't have the back legs - how am I supposed to ride on you? I love the bright colors that you have throughout the avatar. I'm not sold on the eyes with the mouth - it looks a little scary to be honest.
Mythos: Mmm, those off-tone colors! You absolutely achieved the elegant look you sought out for here- the avatar isn’t cluttered or out of balance feeling in my opinion. I’m very excited about several of the choices you made for this- the flowers on the ‘mane’, the hair style, the gold sash and red ‘saddle’ scream merry-go-round/carousel horse to me. There’s the pole, the cover of the actual ride... and the face! The eyes and mouth were brilliant selections on your part in recreating a carousel horse. My only critique is that I would have loved to have seen you with the full centaurian body (four hooves) so that it would intersect with the pole, but there is a lot going on here that I really love!
Seiki: The carousel horse is a brilliant idea. One of my big qualms with your entry is that you only included the front legs of the horse rather than the entire body. It would have made a more realistic carousel horse for someone to ride on. As I said with Eastriel, I adore your adornments, however I think that the actual outfit is a little bit of a mishmash. It would have been better if you simplified the outfit and made it as basic as possible.
Score: 29/40 - WINNER!
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Last edited by fireprincess; 10-08-2014 at 05:18 PM..
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