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Old 12-27-2015, 09:05 AM

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Originally Posted by xuvrette View Post
My experience is... the faster the action, the shorter your sentence!
Try to tone down description(which I fail), focus on plain action.

Well, of course you can't have sentence like.
A punch, B kick, A dodge, B elbow attack...
just have to strike a good balance of short and make the sentence more...erm... storylike?

I am no expert, just what I like to read about action. Cause those flowery description of the weapon, flashy description of their awesome boot while kicking.... makes me faint.
... and that is what I tend to write... I am curbing it now. *sighs*
I see, that makes a lot of sense! I tend to be very descriptive too lol, i suspect that that's my problem. I'll have to try and curb it myself. Thank you and good luck!