What I Am Here For:

I am always looking for feed back on the characters and plots I create. I think they are good but you just don't know until you have other read over what you have made and give you honest feed back.That is my goal here today I wanna find out what you people true think about my character and plots. I don't want anyone to hold back on their thoughts. So tell me if you think I need more detail when describing my plots and characters. Tell me if you think my character is a 'Perfect Character', if he is too depressing or cheerful to be believable. I was all the feed back I can get.

Not Worthy Points:

#1: I consider my self to be a semi-literate roleplayer. When I roleplay I tend to use an paragraph intro and as the roleplay goes on more and more of my character's personality, hopes, dreams and powers come out. Since I can not take my time and slowly introduce each character I post on this forum, I have taken the step of making a Character Profile which will give you the shortest and most detailed run down of my character that I can. I have also chosen to use pictures instead of describing my character in depth so that you will not have to read so much text.

#2: The plots I post on this forum are the full plots and they have not been edited to save space. I will make sure to add the roleplay Genre that the plots belong to so there is no doubt in where each plot refers to. Some of the plots might be a little confusing. that is why I would love your feed back on them. I know I can follow the plots I make up, but can other people follow them as well?

#3: Once in a while I might post a Full paragraph intro in the forum. But this will only happen if I really, really like that way introduced him or her. Just like the plot and character profiles I wanna know if the intro is believable, if its too detailed or not enough detail was put into it, and if the why my character interacts with things around him or her and other people could really happen. I will put the Roleplay Genre with the Paragraph intro to limit confusion.


These characters and Plots have come right out of my head so please do not steal them from me. If you really like a plot or character ask me first if you can use it or not. I will most likely not have a problem with it. In fact I would be joyed to know someone love a Character or plot that much.

Updates:

Under Updates I'll tell you people of new character profiles that can be found on through out the forum. It will make finding the new things I have posted very easy. When the forum become many pages long

...as of right now there is nothing to report ^^

Character Study # 1

Name:
Edward Hull

Age:
25 (When he was turned into a Werewolf)

Gender:
Male

Race:
Werewolf

Appereance:

Human Form


Werewolf Form


Background Info:

As a human Edward as a sickly boy. All of his life was lived from his bedroom. Even through his parents were the Lords of a small patch of land and had enough money to buy the best medicine for their son, He never seemed to get better. Unwilling to give into the Doctors ideas about the time it would take for Eward to die. Lord and Lady Hull Spent every penny they took to see their son got the best education that money could buy, to ensure that when their son made it through this 'trying' time he would be well prepared for the life of a noblemen in a near by city.

But the dear the Lady and Lord had was not to be. Edward grew weaker with every year that went by. By the time Edward had turned 25 he could barely walk. Seeing their son in this state fill the Lord and Lady with sadness. Lord Hull even toyed with the idea of killing his son to put him out of pain. It became a routine for the Lord to wake up in the middle of the night and check on his only son, to see if he was still living or not. This 'morbid duty' as the Lord thought of it was his and his alone to do. For his wife and Pregnant with their second child need all the rest she could get.

It was during on of these nightly check ups that the Lord Found his son missing from the room. Rushing to the window He his son in the Rose garden in the arms of strange women that had a unnatural look about her. How and Why he went out into the Garden that night was for only Edward to know. When Both the Lord and his servants arrived at the Edwards side they found him dead. His body was pale and cold, there was deep bite and claw marks all over his body, but none of them where bleeding. It was like the his body was drained of all his blood. Lord Hull look around for the lady he had seen But she was gone with out a trace. The lord and Lady buried their son in a specially made mausoleum. Lord Hull never got a full nights sleep again. He rose Every night and paced around the castle. The state his son body was in when He had found him, left him in a uneasy state of mind. Something wasn't right and he could feel it. The night of the full moon marked one month since Edwards death. Lord Hull rode for the gave site alone and with a signal red rose to lay on his sons stone coffin. The Lord found the coffin open and empty. The Lord was shock and rod away from the grave as fast and he could. He told no one of what he had seen. Unable to help himself the Lord thought back to the empty coffin. Had grave robber stolen his sons body? Or did he in fact rise from the dead?

Bio:

Edward Hull had risen from the grave. As his father looked on with fear at the empty coffin, Edward was curled up on the floor just out of sight in the shadows. It had taken a month for his weak body to gain enough to move once again. Whatever that women did to him had changed him, for the better he thought. Edward soon found he was stronger, faster, and his sense had all become heightened. His appearance had also changed, hair becoming a silver-Grey, and eye turned a demonic yellow, just like that of a wolfs.

He could not go where he wanted and do anything he wished. As his adjusted to his new found powers, Edward learn that Human food will only delay his hunger for a while, it will never stop it. Only By feeding on flesh and blood the hungry will go away completely until the next time he needed to feed. Only at night, under a moon, can he change his shape into that of a wolf. He also learned that when feeding on the nights with a full moon, it is best if he removes the hearts of his victims. Because with their hearts intact, the poor people he feeds on can become Werewolf. (But ONLY those people who have been feed upon ON the night of a FULL MOON)
Edward knows that there is no need for more monsters like him, running around at night. He found out the hard way,at the start of it all, that if he doesn't feed his hunger for blood he will die. Over time, the way he felt about the blood changed. He began to like the feeling of hunting and killing his prey, about ripping apart their flesh with his clawed hand and teeth.

The only thing that didnt change at all was his personalty. Edward was still a fiery headed youth, who would never back down from something he knew was right. Unfortunately his temper was like his father and when he got made, he got mad in a big way. Easily side tracked, He would always stop to help out those who needed it. No matter what the cost was to him. In fact he had lost a few jobs because he wasn't on time enough. His mother would have been both proud and ashamed at the same time. The fact that he could no longer see his parent hurt him the most, But Edward knew it would be better for both him and parents never to meet again. He did visit the family home a lot. Although it was at night while they all slept. Edward had not aged since his 'so called' death. But his parents had grown older and he had seen his younger brother grow up before his very eyes. He would be a fine noble man. He was just as stubborn and kind hearted as Edward is. His family dissevered some happiness in their life time. Edward felt that all the surfing he was feeling now, he deserved. The only reason he took that women offer to become a monster was because he was scared to die. He did want his life to end before he had a chance to live it.