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Old 10-30-2009, 10:21 PM

This is only an idea for a book. I have absalutly no details. I just need to know what you think about the basic idea.

A teen girl, Violet, and her friends, Emerald [Emme], Ruby, Aquamarine [Aqua], and Crystal suddenly find out they weren't just named colors and gems. They were born witches for a sertain prophacy. Each girl has the name of their specific witch element. Violet has ice, Emerald has earth, Ruby has fire, Aquamarine has water, and Crystal has air. These young girls have no idea the danger of this magical journy.

So, what do you think? I'm not even sure if it's a very good idea, but I thought I'd give it a try. Does it sound interesting?

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Old 10-31-2009, 02:00 AM

If you could make it work, I think it could be good.
I find the idea to be a little generic, but there's nothing wrong with that.

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Old 10-31-2009, 04:37 AM

Agreement with the genericness, but it could be good.
Also, you might want to spell "prophecy" and "journey" correctly. :)
And it really depends on the journey they go on. Elaborate?

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Old 10-31-2009, 05:29 AM

Sorry about my spelling (I was sort of in a rush). When I said "Journey", I meant like how they learn their powers, what the prophecy means, and why they were the ones to fulfill this prophecy.

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Old 10-31-2009, 10:18 PM

One more agreement for the apparent generic-ness of it, but heck, it wouldn't be generic if it hadn't been made to work before.
The details, I think, are what make or break a story like this.

You might play with their names some more. The idea that they are named for their element will only work if their parents knew about their abilities either before they were born or very shortly afterwards. If this is the case, then it makes sense. If not, well, maybe they're given names when the powers emerge?
And does this take place in "our" world or a completely different one? Crystal, Violet and Ruby are more common as names. (And you helped out Emerald by naming her Emme) But I'm a little concerned about Aqua. I don't imagine that would be an easy name to grow up with.

If you get some more details or other such things, I suggest editing your first post and sharing with us! I think we'll be of more help when you have more details.

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Old 11-01-2009, 08:01 PM

Acctually, their parents did know about the prophecy. In old stories [on very rare occasions], when one's child was was born to fulfill a prophecy, the parents would have a dream of their child, and her/him finishing the time of darkness--whenever that may be. All the parents were friends and had somehow told eachother of their dreams. That's how they came up with their children's specific names.

Yes, the story takes place in our world, hundreds of years into the future.

I was having a hard time picking whether the water witch's name should be Aquamarine or Sapphire. Which do you think is a better name? If you know any more good teen girls' names that are a gem or stone that has any type of blue color in it, please say so and I will look into it. Thank you! :)

I hope that helps some.

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Old 11-02-2009, 03:40 AM

Well, I did a quick search on the internet and found a list of gemstones by color. You can check that out Here if you'd like.

Maybe you can find something in there that you like?

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Old 11-22-2009, 11:35 PM

I like those. Wow, I had no idea they had a list! Well, I picked out a bunch of names and stuff then brought it to school for people to pick their fave. Sapphire was the most common, acctually. What do you think about that name? Does it sound a bit more realistic? :?:

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Old 11-24-2009, 04:46 PM

I like Sapphire much better. =]

It might also be worth working out how the parents were all friends. It's such an unlikely thing that I think that you should make a point of it in the story to give it some reason.

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Old 11-27-2009, 07:01 PM

That makes sense, thanks for pointing that out. I'll try to think of something to explain that... :)

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Old 12-09-2009, 10:31 PM

Like what has been said before, it is in fact a fairly generic idea, but most plots start off that way and then develop into their own story as it goes along. I think the idea has great potential if you work out more details to make it exciting. Personally, when I like one book, I look for other books like it because despite them being similar, I like that familiarity. So having a beginning idea be something that was done before is never a bad thing, unless you rip something off completely. That, I'm quite positive, is not the case here.

If I was working with this idea myself, different things I'd want to explore would be did their parents become friends upon hearing about the prophecy? Did they make sure the girls would be friends so that they could work together? I think it might be more interesting if at least one of the girls wasn't friends with them, just because friends together doesn't seem to sound very conflicting. Conflict is what makes a story really interesting and exciting to read! Then again - you've got a lot of space to add in conflict of other things for that.

The idea is pretty interesting though, I'd be curious to see where you went with it :)

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Old 12-09-2009, 10:39 PM

ya i kinda agree with the genericness.......but other than that i like the idea of it..........i love the name of Saphire :).......it is a great idea...........................................whe n r u planning on making book......i woiuld be very interested in reading it......if u do write it then u should post it so everyone could read it......................................it sounds interesting but make it less common.........................other than that i love the idea of it........ PEACE OUT CUZ :>

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Old 06-22-2010, 05:05 PM

Thanks, Tater. Nicely put. But for future refrences, I would not put so many periods, because it could be considered abuse of the coin-posting-thingie.
And just so you know, I don't think if I ever do write it, that it would be a good idea. Some people can act like it is their own because there are not real strict copywrite laws on here.
And could you please stop posting everywhere that we are cousins? I'd rather people not know... :lol:
But thatnks for the comments! :D

 


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