
05-02-2010, 08:15 PM
Well so far, I think your plot sounds a little predictable. I think you need to come up with some kind of twist to make the story interesting and unique. This is not to sound offensive at all, so I apologize if it does. I have read many stories where I think I can predict the outcome and the author throws in something so unexpected that I can't put the book down. And so far, you only have perhaps three lines worth of summary, so there are plenty of places to put your own personal spin on the story line.
A way to perhaps get yourself started on the story is to start building the world that your character gets trapped in. Try creating the culture, the landscape, everything down to the last detail. You won't use most of it for your story (for example, your readers might never need to know about the religion practiced on this world, or the festivals celebrated, or the popular musical instruments, or the chief forms of torture, or whatever), but sometimes immersing yourself into this new world will help you figure out how you want your plot to go. And even if you end up deciding that the world you just created doesn't fit for Arielle's story, you still got a lot of practice and you might want to use the world for something else.
Of course, writing exercises that work for some people don't work for everybody, so don't get discouraged if trying world-building doesn't work. But good luck finding one that fits with you, and good luck writing your story!
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