I've got a couple things I'd like to point out, some suggestions, others what I think is a mistake. But than, my grammar isn't perfect, it just seems slightly off to me.
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A small gust of wind blew, knocking his hood back, and revealing his bald head. Black veins webbed across his head, and his pale skin nearly glowed in the moonlight.
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Very descriptive, even though its simple. My only point here is that you might want to use a different word for the second head. Perhaps crown. The flow you have going in that entire paragraph is rather cut off at the second head. At least for me.
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The Horde let out a sinister laughter, and tossed the sword from hand to hand, taunting me. I knew I needed to wait for him to make the first move, so I watched him closely. Moments passed, the only sound was the wind blowing, and the occasional shuffling of feet as we adjusted our stance, waiting for the right moment.
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That first sentence is what gets me here. Either something needs to be added, perhaps a "bout of sinister laughter" or change laughter to laugh. Possibly with the addition of "while tossing" . I think it may be tenses that are messing with me here.
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He turned his head to face me, blinked, and that was it. His breathing stopped. I watched as his eyes unfocused, and his chest stopped rising and falling. I reached over to close his eyes, and cross his arms over his chest. Eventually someone would find him, and bury him.
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Same with this. I think your tenses switch every once in awhile, but over all it's a good story, and very exciting.