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Old 12-09-2007, 02:09 AM

Can I please get crit's on this? Her arm is bugging me (I realize it's really light, and I apologize for that... my camera and my pencil+Paper art doesn't exactly get along very well...)



This is finished, Yay.

Click this link for the image It's the "Newest Art" that is displayed on the page =3

(Oh, and feel free to browse my site =P)

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Old 12-09-2007, 02:51 AM

I can't really see her arm,
but her shoulders seem a tad too broad.
And her right side seems to curved.
I understand faces divet,
but not that dramatically.
And her waist seems to narrow.

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Old 12-09-2007, 02:53 AM

She's got ridiculously high cheekbones (Intentional. She was crossed with a panther... cats hav ethe slim high cheekbone look.. so does she)

Also, her body is on an angle. So.. I don't think the shoulders are too broad.

I was thinking the waist was too small too.. Hmm, I should play around with that.

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Old 12-09-2007, 03:12 AM

I like it very much, although the side of her face looks extremely awkward. Try to make the crease less deep.

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Old 12-09-2007, 07:28 AM

Rose for the cheekbones. I think they're headed in the right direction for a panther/girl.

What would happen if the rest of her face were also brought to this degree of catlike distortion? What would it do to her lips? Her nose? Her forehead?
Not that you have to do any of that, just that I think it would be fun to experiment with.

Shoulders are definitely too broad, one shouldn't be able to fit more than the width of two heads on one's shoulders. Bringing it in a tad will probably fix much of your bad feelings on the arm. Nice work noticing that. And we're possibly missing some muscle at the base of the neck and at the shoulders. Possibly that's just distortion with the size of her shoulders though.

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Old 12-12-2007, 07:59 AM



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Old 12-16-2007, 10:01 PM

It's pretty good. You just need to add more detail, and finish it up. I don't really know of any suggestions for you.

I look forward to seeing it when you are done.

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Old 12-16-2007, 10:44 PM

I have to agree with Eserel, th eside of the face is curvd too far in. Other than that I like it. try to add some details into the short so it looks as greatat the hair.

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Old 12-18-2007, 04:34 AM

Amazing progress so far, but the neck seems a little bit to short for her body.
Maybe work on proportions a bit more.

Other then that its wonderfull :]

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Old 12-18-2007, 12:47 PM

very nice but I can't really see her arms very well

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Old 12-18-2007, 09:40 PM

The shoulders seems a bit too broad and the cheekbone seems to curve in too much, other than that, it's nice ^^

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Old 12-19-2007, 01:12 AM

The face structure is very... well just doesn't look good. Even if you want the person to have a high cheek bone, you present that cheek bone in the shading, not in the outline structure. Even with a high cheek bone, a person still has more 'face' behind or under the cheek.

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Old 12-19-2007, 02:34 AM

Thanks for all the comments, but leave the cheekbone alone. She's got a high one, and there's nothing I can do about it without ruining the hair now anyway.

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Old 12-20-2007, 09:49 PM

I don't think the cheekbone looks bad, but then again I understand what your trying to convey with her face shaped like that. I also agree that not every single person who comments on the picture needs to point out the obvious with that cheekbone. One person saying it doesn't look right is good enough, ((Maybe a second person)) specially if Dev acknowledged the person who first mentioned it. Then you move on to the next thing you'd critique.

Anyway, The only thing I can tell at present is that indeed, as someone else stated ((I was going to add their name, alas I can't find their comment now...)) I think the neck is a little short. But perhaps that's just the fact that she has a choker/necklace on that makes it seem short.

I can't wait until you finish it. I'd love to be able to tell where the rest of her is. lol. It's such a light pencil sketch that I can barely tell. Anyway, it's wonderful.

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Old 12-22-2007, 02:52 AM

i really like the ears!!! lo, not that this is comeing from a agreat artist or something, but the jaw looks a bit odd... but i really like it!

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Old 12-22-2007, 04:12 AM

Pretty good. I like it. Especially the hair.

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Old 12-22-2007, 05:30 AM

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Originally Posted by Yotsy
I don't think the cheekbone looks bad, but then again I understand what your trying to convey with her face shaped like that. I also agree that not every single person who comments on the picture needs to point out the obvious with that cheekbone. One person saying it doesn't look right is good enough, ((Maybe a second person)) specially if Dev acknowledged the person who first mentioned it. Then you move on to the next thing you'd critique.

Anyway, The only thing I can tell at present is that indeed, as someone else stated ((I was going to add their name, alas I can't find their comment now...)) I think the neck is a little short. But perhaps that's just the fact that she has a choker/necklace on that makes it seem short.

I can't wait until you finish it. I'd love to be able to tell where the rest of her is. lol. It's such a light pencil sketch that I can barely tell. Anyway, it's wonderful.
Whenever I go to one of these threads, I don't look at anyone elses comments, this allows me to make an honest opinion, not one influenced by somebody else. So sorry for pointing it out a second or third time (still never read anyones opinion, i skim)

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Old 01-06-2008, 12:57 PM

Finished it~

Check the first post for a link.

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Old 01-07-2008, 06:41 AM

Fabulous picture! Very sexy too! The shading on the hair and body is fantastic! The eyes look a little off though... Proportionate-wise. The breasts and cheek-line makes it look very cartoon-ish, like ummm that chick in the red dress from warner bros whose married to a rabbit or something... Don't know her name.

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Old 01-07-2008, 07:27 AM

Thank you =3 Took me like... 30+ Hours XD lol.

Why is it everyone picks on the cheek bone even though I've already dicussed why it's different?

For the eyes, I know. I realized that one was off after I"d already finished it...... and to fix the eye would screw up the image >< So... it's stuck like that.

And how does the bust look Cartoonish...????

I think the character you're looking for, is Jessica Rabbit.

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Old 01-07-2008, 09:41 PM

It looks really nice shaded.
Her head seems to look a bit weird. (I guess it is because of the right side of the cheek.) The neck seems a bit big for the chest too. Overall, it is really ncie though! ^_^.

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Old 01-10-2008, 11:04 PM

I think it's not the cheekbone, but a piece of hair that's hanging, I see it differently

 


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