comments on comments: if cursing fits the character, then it should be used. Those who grow up in less than ideal environments (we're looking at a mother who's working- we don't know if the stepfather is, and a step father who's abusive), can pick up such language. Its assumed that her father would be one to curse, as he's already showing far worse actions.
Title- I say its not too long, but to blunt with the main character, and too loose with the words used (rather isn't a strong word)
And my personal comments:
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If I was a good girl he wouldn’t have hurt me so deeply in so many ways.
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You can probably end with in so deeply- I don’t think “in so many ways” really adds much to it.
And for a while, it was good.
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When he told me I was a useless failure who had no future I figured he must be right. When he yelled at me, I thought I deserved it. When he used his fists I thought I must have done something wrong. When he would get drunk and… Do things to me, I figured I must have been a bad girl.
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You have a pattern with the sentences’ contents, but you change the flow with having a comma in the second and fourth ones. The commas help brek them up, and I think you should have commas through all four, or hyphens (em dashes) in all four.
You definitely leave the reader hanging and wanting more. I wish you went into a bit more detail, to pull us in to her emotions at the time. You have a good start, please continue if you feel inspired!