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Old 02-03-2008, 09:07 AM

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What are my weaknesses?

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Old 02-03-2008, 09:41 AM

What struck me immediately, for the first image, was that that the twist of the body is a little awkward. While the head and neck are turned to the right, the body is suddenly turned to the center, and the bottom half is turned to the left. There was only one example of this, so it's not much of a weakness, I guess. C: The fourth from last example has a strange twist from the head and neck, to the rest of the body, though. It's not as obvious as the first example.

For the third image, the background's perspective threw me off, particularly because of the table's shape compared to the wall. A vanishing point will help with this~ Oh, but again, there is only one example of a background.

Oh, but for most of your drawings... I noticed that the arms are rather long, especially from the elbow to the hand (the ulna and radius). Because of that, most of the waists seem too high up. (The fourth one is a good example of what I mean about the long arms, but also for high waists. However, the fifth example shows that the arm at the humerus is really short, in comparison to the ulna and radius.)

Hmm.... I think that anatomy in general needs help, but determining where the folds go are your biggest weakness. Most of them have been really wrong (or missing), if I could be so blunt. x3;;;

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Old 02-03-2008, 10:48 AM

Thank you, very helpful. <3

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Old 02-03-2008, 11:47 AM

I feel like you lack the vibrancy in the colors that one could gain. It is like you are afraid of the pigment, and therefore use a lot of white. It might just be the scanner though. Sorry if that sounds harsh,just how i was taught in water color. Also the change in mediums show, for The color pencil you have to be careful about the texture it gives, and it isn't necessary to outline all your drawings as you are, maybe a thinner line weight when you outline. I suggest also having multiple line weights so that the thickness changes depending on what you want. For instance the outline of the face be lighter,but leave the shading for the boots thinker. I suggest play around with line weights with ink and see what you like best,this takes a lot of practice, and I still don't have it completely down in my drafting class.

As for What I like, I like the hand postures, and the different characters. I also like the designs of the clothes, and the shading that you have down already.

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Old 02-03-2008, 07:13 PM

You are definitely amazing at poses. All of your art seem to have such vibrant poses. (rather than people just standing there looking at us.) I really like it. The only thing you should work on is the feet proportion and hands. They seem to not match with the head size and chest. Just practice more. Your art is gorgeous though. :D.

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Old 02-03-2008, 08:25 PM

Well like its already been stated before the position of the body is a bit off in the first one. Also the proportions are off too. The arms at the top are the same as the bottom. They have some variation naturally, but the arms here are like sticks. I think the neck might be too long too. And the angle for the right arm seems awkward, but good use of diagonal lines, they move the eye to the body. The highlight form the light source is good and consistent, however there aren't much variations in the values. the body has some variation, but the cltohes are msotly falt. What media did you use?

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Old 02-05-2008, 08:03 AM

First off, let me say that you're very good at poses. :3 That was something that stood out to me right away. You've got the one thing down that ALWAYS trips me up when I try to draw. :3

The one biggest weakness that stood out to me was that your proportions are generally off, especially in the arms. For most humans, the wrist is about level with the waist/groin area. Stand in a mirror and check it out for yourself. You'd think they'd be longer, but nope! In a few of those (especially the second), the arms looked like they could almost come down to the knee.

Also, your colors are rather dull. They are nice, but not nearly what they could be. That may just be your scanner, and if that's the case, I suggest playing with the color filters in an image editing program (such as GIMP) to correct it. If that's what it looks like on paper, then I suggest using more colors. If you don't have more, don't be afraid of crosshatching, blending, and varying the pressure with pencils and the like...and if you don't use pencils, you would be AMAZED at what a 64-pack of Crayola crayons could do for altering hues and values if used correctly. If it is an option, though, I would simply suggest getting more of whatever you're using.

Finally, work a little on clothing folds. Look at the way clothing folds on real people. In art, as a rule, observation is your friend. :3

I hope you find this at least a little helpful. ^^;

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Old 02-05-2008, 04:51 PM

You know, your poses really are amazing! That is one area I always find myself having trouble with I shall admit. *Blushes deeply* But yes, I agree with the others when it is said your general proportions are a slight off.

Thankfully, with practice, this is soemthing easily remedied I am certain! If you can find a site with good stock, or a book for anatomy, both are great helps to drawing the human body! Just keep sketching, practicing, and pretty sure I am certain your drawings will jump out!

I'd also invest some time in working on coloring as well. Believe me when I say coloring is an awesome help to a piece!

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Old 02-06-2008, 05:26 PM

Ohkay, here goes! -ahem-

First: The jacket looks a bit stiff. [my left side] On the left, it looks rather like a piece of paper flapping in the breeze. xD Also, the fur doesn't really look like fur. Maybe draw lots of small brush lines to make it seem more real? :3

Second: I think this one is pretty cool. *___* Maybe it's just my preference, but I think the arm holding the flower is a little too long. xD;

Third: SOmething's wrong with the clothes...can't really pinpoint exactly what. I think you drew too many crease lines, and it makes her look sorta bulgy. I think crease lines should be straight and a little curved at the end. :3
The wall and ground have a different...dunno, perspcetive? than the table. The table should follow or be paralell to the wall, right?

Fourth: Luff it. <3

Fifth: Eh...arms are too short this time. xD

Sixth: NIce! But I think the head is twisted a little too much.

Seventh: THis is cute. *w* But maybe, keep her legs closer together when you draw them from under the skirt.

Eigth: Uhm...is he sitting down? o__o If not, then the legs are too bent. Also, the girl should be more...I dunno, her body should be facing the guy. It sort of looks like she's about to roll off. xD;;

Ninth: I likes it! Something's funny with the hand that's picking hair, but dunno what.

KEEP UP THE GOOD DRAWINGS.
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Especially that chibi. <3



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Old 02-11-2008, 12:12 AM

They're all great xD you've obviously been drawing a good long while, anatomy would probably be your weak point, where character flare and pose is your strong suit.

The other thing I see in all of them is the extra length of the lower arm compared to where the waist ends, as well as very skinny legs compared to the size and girth of the torso. Oh! And ankles... Except on the girl in purple with the horns, she has lovely ankles.

And lastly, I adore the chibi! She just looks ever so happy and... chibi... xD

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Old 02-11-2008, 01:06 AM

Thank you all!

XD I keep having to open the link to remember which piece is which.

The good thing is all the mistakes I've been informed of are things I already know about but haven't gotten around to fixing. XD

Anatomy book, here I come!

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Old 02-11-2008, 02:52 AM

*laughs* Good luck! If you like, I could provide you with the names of a few good ones I have been using lately myself. *nods* tehre is even one devoted to poses, using models and whatnot. You'd be surprised which books actually end up being useful. :3

 


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