Hi, I'd like it if any moderator or so could lock this thread for me. The thing is I don't post here any more and it seems that no one else it either. Since I've come around to a huge case of writers block it might be a few months before something comes to mind. and I don't want to break the rules by coming back here every five month for one post ^^"

Thank you,
Qeanin

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Stories in progress:

Space's Children


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Finished Stories:

Thrae and Sveargith



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Story Art:

None yet.


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Abandoned Stories:

Wings

All Ace

Time Means Nothing

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Time Means Nothing

Part Two


Winter was awakened by the sound of tires on loose gravel. Sitting up she looked over at Jenny. She was fast asleep. Winter pondered over why that boy had smiled when the light hit her eyes.
"Does he have something for pretty eyes?" she wondered. The whole set-up was to weird for Winter to wrap her head round just yet. She needed more time and information, before she could even start thinking of a reasonable conclusion. The limo stopped and the men told them to get out. After gently waking Jenny up, they both climbed out of the car. In front of them stood a building that was two stories high and it looked rather old, but it didn't look like it was about to fall apart.
"W-where are we?" Jenny said in a shaky voice.
"I honestly don't know." Winter said, following the men to the door. The two men open the door, told them to go inside and then left, seemingly in a hurry. Winter and Jenny walked in slowly. the house on the inside looked more modern than the outside. catching the smell of food Winter followed it and found herself in a big dinning room slash living room. Jenny came up behind her.
"Where do you think we should go?" she asked.
"I dunno..." Winter replied. Winter looked around, trying to find some something that might be able to tell her more about this place. She walked over to the living room part. The fireplace was huge. Above the fireplace a picture hung. It was a picture of the boy, but a tall elderly man stood behind him. Winter couldn't really get a good look at it because the picture had faded. Just then Jenny let out a small shriek that made Winter spin around. There he was, the boy.
"No need to be frightened." he said in that same demonic voice form before. Jenny shrank back and hide behind Winter.
"May i be so kind as to ask your name?" Winter said in a voice much braver than she felt.
"Diamen. Diamen Ninth." he looked cooly at her.
"Why did you kidnap us and the other girls?" Winter said getting to the point.
"I was looking for two girls i knew. You two were the closest to them. Come, I'll show you to your rooms." Diamen said and gestured for them to follow. Winter started to follow and Jenny took her hand for reassurance. They went into a small library, study looking place and went up a spiral staircase. The hallway at the top of the stairs was big and had only a few doors. Diamen stopped infront of two doors.
"Pick a door lady's." he said, smiling.
Jenny let go of Winter's hand, opened the door on the right and went inside. Winter went over to the left door, and said without lookign at him.
"Thank you Diamen...." and she went into the room.
Winter walked into the room. It was HUGE! the walls were a dark violet, and all the furniture matched. a big bed with drapes around it stood in the upper right-hand corner of the room, a big walk-in closet was next to it, the entire wall opposite the door was mirror. Except for the sliding glass door that lead to her own personal balcony. Winter assumed the door on the left side of the room lead to a bathroom. She was right. The bathroom had a big jacuzzi tub and a big glass walled shower.
"I just hope he doesn't walk in on me when I take a shower." Winter said looking around. Deciding that she did need a shower Winter went to examine the closet. It was about as big as a typical room and had the most beautiful assortment of dresses Winter had ever seen. There was one dress that was on a mannequin. A note was pinned to it.

"It would be most wonderful if you wore this do dinner tonight.
-Diamen"

Winter looked the dress over. It reached the floor and was a gorgeous shade of purple. It was a low cut V-neck and had off shoulder sleeves. A amethyst stone necklace was there as well.
"But, didn't he already feed us?" Winter asked herself a little confused. Then her stomach rumbled.
"I guess I'm still hungry. The car ride must've been a few hours." taking the dress, Winter went into the bathroom and started the shower.

End Part Two

Time Means Nothing

Part Three


Diamen stood outside the doors for a few minutes, just in case. Then he headed further down the hallway and went into the last door on the left. His room was just like the girls except the color was blood red other than purple. Sighing Diamen went outside on the balcony, the wind blew his silver hair in his face but he did not care.
"I hope they are the right ones. If I'm wrong......" His voice trailed off.
"If I'm wrong, they are going to be the ones suffering not me. That will only make my life worse, and I don't need any of that."
Diamen went back into his room and layed down on the bed. He stayed there for a long time, thinking over what Akira had said to him in her last moments of life.

"Diamen...why? What c-compelled you to do this?"
"I-I don't know..."
"You know better. H-humans are not as s-strong as we are. I will soon fade, just like this poor girls l-life. All because...you couldn't wait f-for me to come to you.
"Akira, I'm sorry. I didn't mean to kill her! I was blinded by my need to see you. Blinded by the need t-to...."
"I know, I-I know......................."
"NO! AKIRA!"

Diamen knew that until he could get to talk with one of the girls without having to hide anything, that memory would never go away. He breathed deeply and stood up.
"I should probably get ready for dinner..." With a depressed look on his face he changed. His attire was now red and black instead of blue and white. Standing up strait he headed downstairs. Both the girls were waiting for him.
"Its strange. I don't even know their names, but I used to know these exact people like the back of my hand..." Diamen thought to himself. He sat down. They were both wearing the dresses he had put in their closets.
"You lady's look beautiful tonight. I am truly sorry for any harm done, but i saw no other way to solve my dilemma." Diamen said in a voice he hoped was encouraging. The food was served. It was just an ordinary dinner of matzo ball soup, tilapia, and wine that was made to look more fancy by dimming the lights and having candles on the table.
"I'm Winter." the girl an his left was the first to talk. She was wearing the amethyst necklace he had given to the girl he used to know.
"I'm Jenny..." the girl on his right said. She was wearing the opal necklace.
"It's nice to meet you two." he said taking a bite of fish.
"If you don't mind, could you please tell us who exactly you are looking for?" Winter asked after she had taken a sip of wine.
"But of course. I am looking for my two lost sisters. They were lost to my family when they were only children. It was my duty as the first born to find them, and you two match them in every way to who they were." he said smiling, for this was the truth. Just not all of it. It was bended a little, but not much.
"All this sounds a little unreal to me." Jenny said quietly.
"I understand your disbelief. My father said you wouldn't believe me, but I had to try. Please, at least stay for a month or two. Just so you could maybe get used to all of this." Diamen wasn't ready to let go of his only two chances of a peaceful life.
"I'll stay." winter said, her cheeks slightly red.
"I'll stay too..." Jenny said moving her food around with her fork but not actully eating it.
"I'm glad to hear that." Diamen said, relaxing on the inside. They were staying, and that meant he could get to know them and maybe become a friend. Maybe.

End Part Three

Qeanin: You have a natural taste for description, which is good. You might want to work on using the axiom "show don't tell" in your writing. An example of where you show without telling is the first sentence of "Wings," which is a straightforward description of what the character Quill looks like. In contrast, you show rather than tell in the openingg of "Time Means Nothing," when you describe the movement of a character's hair as he performs an action. Now we know something of what he looks like, but we didn't have to sit through a lengthy description.

Thanks JoieD ^.^ i try not to go to into depth when i write about someone or something, but sometimes i get carried away. i'll make sure you're advice goes to good use <3

Wings

Chapter Two: A New Friend

Quill landed feet first on the ground. She had been sneaking off to go see Thane for about a week now. He was a nice guy, always having a snack ready when she gets there and he was way more interesting than the solitude of her room. Quill ran cross the back lawn, but she was a little more rushed this time. Her father was home that day and she didn't want him to see her from his study window. Thane was waiting for her at the edge of the forest.
"You seem out of breath." he said jokingly.
"Yeah. my dad is home so i wanted to make sure he didn't see me." Quill said panting heavily
"Well it seems he didn't. Lets go, I want you to meet somebody." Thane smiled and took her by the hand. After learning a little more about him, Quill found out that Thane used magic to make the walk to his house and back so short. He said he moved time, or something like that. The sun was high in the sky when they once again arrived at Thane's house.
"So, who is this person your so eager I meet?" Quill asked as Thane flexed his wing before he came in.
"Oh, he's a cute little fella. I found him last night after you left." Thane said going into his room. When he came out he had his hand closed over something.
"Quill I would like you to meet Fribbit." Thane said with a big smile on his face. Thane opened his hands and there was the cutest thing Quill had ever seen. It looked like a green blog about as big as her fist with big sparkle eyes, little frog feet and dragon fly wings and a little antenna sticking up from in between his eyes.
"What is it?" Quill asked picking it up and holding it in her open palms.
"It's a fairy-frog. These little fellows are really rare, if you look for one it will take forever to find it, But if you let one come to you they can be so much company." Thane patted it on the head.
"Fribbit like Quill." the fairy-frog said in a high squeaky voice, and nuzzled closer to her. Quill patted it on the head and sat down.
"So, why exactly can't your dad see you leave the house?" thane asked nibbling on a piece of apple.
"My dad thinks that someone will try and kidnap me for ransom or something. I try telling him that the chances are about thounsand to one of that happening, but he doesn't listen." Quill said and gave Fribbit a little bit of apple.
"Why would some one want to hold you up for ransom?" Thane looked at her confused. Quill had to remind herself that he was part of a world that didn't know to much about hers.
"My father has a lot of money and people want it. They would kidnap me and say that if my father didn't send money they would kill me."

Thrae and Sveargith

this is just a quicky off the top of my head. hope you enjoy <3

Once upon a time, there was a boy. His name was Thrae, Draconic for air. Thrae had the strange power of being able to control the weather. He could make it rain even if there were no clouds in the sky and he could make a strong wind stop in its tracks. Even though Thrae was an important person in the community, many people hated him and called him a demon. After his thirteenth birthday, Thrae decided that he couldn't take it any more and ran into the nearby woods.

Thrae in his anger had forgotten to take anything with him. Scorning himself he looked for a place to stay. Finding a cave he layed down and fell asleep in th entrance.
Thrae was awakened by a loud noise that had come from the cave. Sitting up he looked for what made it. When he found it, he regretted leaving the village. A huge dragon stood over him. It's scales were a magnificent glittering green. "And who might you be?" the dragon asked. Spitting out the word 'you'. "I am Thrae. Who are you?" Thrae stood up to his full hight. "I am Sveargith." the dragon looked down at Thrae as if he were a snack.

Thrae looked up at Sveargith, and with what courage he could muster he spoke "I am sorry for trespassing on your territory. Could you by chance tell me where i could go? That is not the village?" Sveargith sat down and wrapped his tail around his feet. Like a cat. "There is no other place." He said in a blank tone. Thrae sighed and started to walk back to the village. Before Thrae could take five steps, Sveargith grabbed him and tossed him into that cave. "What can you do human? Why would you run away?" Sveargith looked at Thrae with pricing eyes. "I can control the weather." Thrae said now scared. Sveargith contemplated this for a moment, but didn't take his eyes off Thrae. "You will stay here. I know a female dragon that is coming this way. She would like a human servant for her home." As Thrae's eyes widened; Sveargith smiled a toothy smile. "Tough luck human. You should know never to trust a green dragon." Sveargith took Thrae to a cell deep in his cave and left him there. "I should of never left the village." Thrae said holding onto the bars.

All Ace

Part One

Mahogany sat on a park bench watching her little brother Tyke master the monkey bars. Mahogany was sixteen years old with slightly curly golden blond hair, and her eyes were sky blue. Tyke was seven and had short spiky brown hair and the same eyes. It was the beginning of fall and the trees were already all reds and oranges. Mahogany sighed as a cool breeze swept through the park.
"It's a nice day today..." Mahogany said looking up the the sky. A small buzzing came from her coat pocket and she took out her mom's cell phone.
"Hello?" She said standing up.
"Okay, Tyke and i will head home right now. Bye" Mahogany closed the phone and put it back in her pocket.
"Tyke! Mom said it's time to go home!" She called over to him. Tyke jumped down off the jungle gym and ran up to her.
"Alright." he said and took her hand. The walk home wasn't to long, just a couple blocks. When Tyke and Mahogany got home, another car was in the driveway. Mahogany ran to the door, hoping that what she was thinking was correct. She ran head first into the stomac of somebody.
"Whoa, where you going big girl?" said a familiar voice.
"Daddy!" Mahogany huged her father tightly. Tyke came up and huged him to. Mahogany's mother came to the door.
"I thought you kids might like to see your dad the moment he got home." she smiled and took them all inside.


((has writers block. come back later))

Space's Children

by: qeanin


Rayah jolted upright in her bed. She looked over to the clock.
"Damn. Freaking three in the morning..." She grumbled but got out of bed anyway. Tucking the loose stands of her dark mahogany hair behind her ears, Rayah walked over to her window. A silhouette stood there in the green of the lawn.
"Who the heck?" she squinted, trying to get a better view of whoever was there. Then it just disappeared. Like dust int the wind. Rayah shook her head.
"Just a trick of the light. Nothing to worry about." she yawned and started to walk back to here bed.
"I'm no trick of the light." A deep almost demonic voice came from behind her. Rayah whipped around. There in front of her stood a boy who seemed about seventeen.
"Who the hell are you!?" she said in a raised but not loud enough to be yelling. Rayah didn't want to wake the rest of the girls.
"I'm you're Demon, you're darkness." he said, his eyes where glowing purple and his hair was a bright shining sliver that nearly reached the floor.
"M-my what?" Rayah's voice started to shake. She wasn't scared of demon before, but now she felt like running away. Fast.
"You're demon. I'm supposed to take you home to Space, you're mother..." his eyes softened looking right into hers. Rayah stood there stunned for a few second s and then shook her head, coming back to her senses.
"Wait a sec. My mother? I don't have one, she died years ago. The reason I'm in this god-forsaken orphanage." she said waving about her. Her so called demon shook his head.
"That human wasn't your mother. She was just to care for you as long as she could. But now that you are of age, it is my duty to watch over you." he put a lot of emphases on 'my'. He seemed to be ever so slightly exited about the whole thing. The wired thing was, Rayah had calmed down. She was no longer scared and actually wanted to go with him.
"Okay, but first things first. Who are you? Like do you have a name or are you just Demon?" she sarted to get together what little she owned and couldn't live without.
"My name is Thane." He said in a softer voice but it was still demonic.

Space's Children

by: qeanin


Rayah didn't know how he did it, but Thane had moved them from her room in the orphanage to the deck of a tree house in the middle of a beautiful forest in a matter of seconds. Hung on her shoulders was her passenger bag with all of her art and drawing stuff in it, along with her little purple stuffed elephant.
"Woah. How'd you do that?" She said looking over the railing. She couldn't she the forest floor, which made her back up a few steps.
"Magic. Real magic. You'll learn how to do simple thing later. Right now make yourself at home, I'll be taking you to you're mother tomorrow morning." Thane went into the house.

(( writers block. i'll d the rest later <3 ))