
01-12-2008, 10:17 PM
Not really. :?
I'm sorry, it just seems like you're taking the most popular genres and plotlines and combining them, and while that seems like it should be a good combination, just look at Eragon. It just seems sort of boring and trite. Maybe try spicing it up with some things atypical of the genre or putting a twist on it? Is it in a modern setting? Try shifting the time around a little, maybe to feudal japan or steampunk europe, just to make it a little more interesting and out of the mold?
Also, the names "Crow", "Lucifer", and "Lucin" strike me as about as trite as the current story pitch. Is there any reason you picked them that have to do with the world or meaning, or do you just happen to fancy them?
:oops: Just my two cents.
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