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Old 06-08-2008, 04:40 AM

I figured that I'd finally make a gallery to showcase my art, though it's not the best. ^^;
I needed a place to put my better pieces away from my doodles on Photobucket, and I'd also love some rates and constructive criticism!





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Old 06-08-2008, 08:35 AM

hm its interesting...i like the first one...its great....umm i cant say so much....its not my kind of art but... i like it ...interesting xDi like the legs of the first one and the shoes...the dress....is a bit...nya...the crinkels...(is that the right word?) are not really correct i think and perhabs it would be prettier if there would be more baggy....hope you understand...i give my best my english is bad TT^TT

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Old 06-14-2008, 03:14 AM

Crinkles? Do you mean the folds? ^^;

Yeah, I see what you mean... =P;
I agree, it could use more folds to look more lifelike instead of so cartoon-y.

Thanks for your input! ( sorry for the late-ish reply! ><; )

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Old 06-15-2008, 04:12 PM

the bodies are good..faces..need work/not there on one..but yeah it's good. you might need to work on arm length a bit more but that's it. or balance it out by making the first one have longer legs.

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Old 06-15-2008, 07:48 PM

Thanks for the critique!
I agree; I never noticed it before, but on the first one, her bend hand would be too long if it was straightened.
I do need to work on faces. xD; I'm still trying to find my own style, so I'm unsure of making my faces the way I want to, since it disagrees with my linearting and coloring. .__. ;

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Old 06-15-2008, 09:20 PM

Most of the stuff has already been mentioned, but you might also want the second one's hair to look less...flat?
The first one isn't even shaded(hair) but it looks more real than the second girl's hair.
You might want to try adding in more lines in to distinguish each part of the body more on the second one as well.

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Old 06-16-2008, 09:42 PM

I really like them. You can make everything out, I don't have any questions as to what something is, and for me that's key. I like the top one the best, but I would like to see something on the face, or at least a shadow covering up the eyes, something like that. But without something for a face, it feels like its missing something.

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Old 06-17-2008, 12:45 AM

You have a very good grasp on proportion so far. The first picture has great proportion. The second is great as well, a very dynamic pose , but a little out of wack on her lower half. Girls hips can be a bugger sometimes. Her right leg should travel in towards her hips more instead of ending abruptly at her crotch. Also I notice some difficulty on line consistency. You can see the points where you stopped and picked up your pen and then started again. Try to take longer strokes and end at a joint or fold. ;) Add some line weight if you can. It ads to a picture when you use varriations of thick and think lines.

Your doing great though. Keep at it! ^^o

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Old 06-17-2008, 01:53 AM

I like the first one. Asdie from the fact that she has no face, it looks great! The second one looks a bit out of proportion. I think her pose may have been a bit hard to draw, and so her shoulders look a bit far apart. Keep working on it!

 


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