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Old 02-04-2007, 12:06 PM

I wrote a fictional love letter for a competition & I've just entered it.


Love Letter: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/48032521/


Or you can read the text below. :D I'd like comments on DA though.


I hope you like this letter. Enjoy.



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Dear Terrel,

You and I are in different worlds. You have a life of your own. I don't even think that I was ever a part of that world of yours.

Your mother means well when it comes to you. When she's around others she's so sweet looking, so proud, so motherly and so caring. But I know you know better. She was extremely cruel to me, and she looks down on me because I am poor.

I don't want to be with you for money, I don't care about money. I've always liked you for you. I really hope you know that.


To be honest, when your mother started being cruel towards me, I hadn't even thought about looking at you that way. But during this last month things have changed. I am seeing you in a different light. I have no idea why I haven't seen you like this before since you've always been in front of me, and we've known each other for so long. Maybe I'm just an idiot, I don't know.


I love the way you make me laugh, I love your cheeky smile, but most of all I love you whole. There is absolutely nothing I would change about you. Your bad habits, your flaws, I would take it all.

Although my eyes are upon you, yours I believe are not lying on me. You've got your sights far higher than mine, far beyond what I can achieve, and I'm happy for you. I want you to do your best, I want you to complete all your goals, and I want you to be the greatest in everything you do. All in all, I just want you to be happy.


I won't lie. I am happy to see you leave, but in a different perspective. I have to stop thinking about you, and I have to start thinking about myself. Whenever you're around I can't think properly, and I can't concentrate. But now that you're leaving, I can finally start a life of my own without you. Living without you will be tough though, I can admit that.


Do you remember that time we got locked out of the building where we were having school camp at, and we had to sleep outside? I will never forget that. It was quite funny, especially when you said you needed a blanket and used a pile of autumn leaves instead! Then that night we fell asleep together under the stars. I even remember pointing out that constellation Orion to you, and you said it looked like a duck. To this day when I look towards the sky at Orion, I still wonder how you ever saw a duck.

It is that moment with you I will cherish the most.


Please don't forget me. If there's anything I could ask for, it would be for a place in your memory. I won't be selfish and ask for a place in your heart, although if you do have one in there for me I'll gladly take it.



Have a safe flight and take care. I will miss you, and I hope that no matter where you are and what you do, your dreams will soar.



Goodbye Terrel,



Lia.

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Old 02-04-2007, 01:57 PM

OK, I'm probably being extremely dim, but I can't see how to leave a comment in DA... maybe because I'm not a member? Anyway... I love your letter, Lilithia, it's very touching and moving. I like the slow realisation of her feelings about him, which seems very true, and how we sometimes feel about people we are close to. She wants the best for him, while recognising the truth of their situation, and that the best realistic option for them both is to part and move on in their own lives, while remembering each other with tenderness, and hopefully, love. Good luck with the competition - let us know how you get on. :D

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Old 02-04-2007, 09:34 PM

Thanks so much Nema! You're the first to read it! XD I'm glad you liked it! I've never written a fictional love letter before!!

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Old 02-04-2007, 10:07 PM

You're welcome! :D

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Old 02-04-2007, 10:18 PM

Flink's too lazy to sign in to Deviantart. XD

Flink agrees with Nema. The letter seems so real and Flink actually felt sorry, yet happy for the person writing it. Sad that she had to let go of someone she wanted and happy that she finally realised that even though she now knows she's in love, she also knows that the best thing for her life and his life is to let him go and pursue his high hopes.

Flink wishes you all the luck in the competition, and if they don't like your letter they're blind and heartless.

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Old 02-04-2007, 10:22 PM

Well then let's hope they like this letter. XD Thanks so much Flink!!

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Old 02-10-2007, 04:00 PM

Wow. <33
Such a pretty letter. X3
Very touching.
To be able to grasp such a mindset & be able to give up love in order for the other to be happy is sucha a wonderful concept.

Very nicely done Lili.
& g'luck in the contest. X3

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Old 02-10-2007, 04:01 PM

I'm glad you found it on here. Thanks for the wonderful comment Megan!! I hope I win, but if not, I'm glad it inspired me to write this!

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Old 02-16-2007, 02:11 AM

UPDATE!!


Bad news... I did not win the contest but I received a special mention. :D


http://generatinghype.deviantart.com...1199/#comments


Have a look & see!!

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Old 02-17-2007, 10:00 PM

Well done for getting a special mention, Lilithia! :D Praise indeed, and well-deserved. *nods*

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Old 02-18-2007, 12:47 AM

Thankyou. XD I did read the other letters though, they're very good. The first prize ended up also getting a Daily Deviation on Deviantart. :shock:

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Old 02-22-2007, 04:18 AM

*Sniffles*
Lovely.

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Old 02-23-2007, 11:50 PM

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*Sniffles*
Lovely.
You really like it? Thankyou! :D

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Old 02-25-2007, 07:31 AM

*props* Good work steffles. Not as poetic as I would have liked but it's still well written.

Sorry I sound like an English teacher. XD

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Old 02-25-2007, 07:39 AM

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Originally Posted by cynikles
*props* Good work steffles. Not as poetic as I would have liked but it's still well written.

Sorry I sound like an English teacher. XD

You want something more poetic? Now I know what kind of man you are. You're a hopeless romantic at heart hahaha!!

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Old 02-25-2007, 07:44 AM

I am, what's your point. xD

I was taught at school to use as many metaphors and emotive language as possible, so it's just the way I try to write these days.

But yes, I am a hopeless romantic. XD

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Old 02-25-2007, 07:45 AM

Personally if someone wrote me a love letter that was very poetic, I'd be like WHAT THE HELL? XD Too much...brain... capacity.

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Old 02-25-2007, 07:48 AM

Why? I think poetry is one of the best ways to express the most complex of emotions. That's just me though. xD

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Old 02-25-2007, 08:00 AM

As a letter, it's not so... it seems over the top for me. But if it's simply a poem to be given... that's different... I RECKON anyway!!

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Old 03-06-2007, 07:41 PM

Aww, so sweet... I loved the part about the duck, hilarious. :) I'm not a good one to ask when it comes to writing about love letters though, seems a but overkilled to me but maybe girls like that?

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Old 05-26-2007, 07:01 AM

I don't think it was overkill. Then again, I am a girl. XD

 


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