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06-08-2007, 01:26 AM
ah they are pretty anc cute ^_^
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06-08-2007, 02:14 AM
The faces don't look right.
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06-08-2007, 02:24 AM
mind elaborating?
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06-08-2007, 02:54 AM
I like the faces. ;D
I especially like the first picture, its cute. <333
Neat style. <3
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06-08-2007, 03:23 AM
I mean the faces are off center, when compared to the head.
Also, in the third image the girl making the 'V' sign... her forearm is far too skinny.
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06-08-2007, 03:34 AM
I really like how you colored all of your pieces. It just makes it look soft and happy. The first and fourth ones are probably my favorite, but they all look really cute. Maybe work on antamony a bit just to spiff up your style? But overall awesome job with them. :D
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06-08-2007, 04:07 AM
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I mean the faces are off center, when compared to the head.
Also, in the third image the girl making the 'V' sign... her forearm is far too skinny.
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I concur.. kinda. xD
I think many of the faces are good, but there are a few where the eye, nose and mouth placement is off kilter.
For example, I would say the first one, the face is very good. The eye on our right MIGHT need to be moved down, but I think that's pretty optional as it looks fine as-is.
The second one has a bit more trouble. It looks like you probably had issues with placing the eye because the other eye is hidden. For that one, the easiest fix would probably be to just squish the face inward on our left. This would make his face match his eye position - in other words, it would align the face shape with the way the character is facing. If that makes any sense. Otherwise, you could move the eye to our left, but obviously that's much more difficult and would actually change where the character is facing.
Moving on to the next picture - the blue eyed character on our right, his features are perfect. However, the girl next to him, all her features should be moved up and to our right(though you could probably get away with moving just the eyes, that would work fine too). This is because, taking into account the direction her head is in, there is way too much space between the eye on our right and her face outline. Compare to the left side of the guy's face - there's over twice as much space there. This makes her eyes look sunken. Especially since you don't draw the dip in the eye socket(which is fine, and I think makes the characters very cute :3) when the character is facing 3/4s, you need to be careful about where their eyes are and all that.
For the final picture, her eyes and face match up fine.. it's actually her hair that poses a problem! Of course we can tell that the wind is moving it to our left, but it still looks like there's too much hair on our left. There are a multitude of ways to fix this. The easiest being, just erase a chunk of hair on our left, from top to bottom. If you use your finger, you can easily cover up a bit and see how it looks - there can still be more hair on the left than on the right, but it can't look like it's actually coming from the side - it should be at a steep angle and go more toward the back of her head. It'll still look like her hair is moving, but at the same time I think it will fix the alignment problem we're seeing.
Those are the main problems. As mentioned before, there are some sizing issues in the third picture. But since the faces are obviously the features of your art, I thought I would focus on them.
Besides that, your art is really super adorable. @ [email protected]; I really like the pastel coloring, and your shading is pretty good. I love how you color the eyes - they really pop out, which I think is why it's easier to see any mistakes as far as placement goes. I liked the folds in the dress on the last picture, too. So cute! x3
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06-08-2007, 06:12 AM
second picture: ...I have no idea what you're saying. @ - @;;;
third picture: I SAID IT HAD ISSUES OKAY.. D:
fourth: thanks? XD yeah. hair and stuff. I have a lot of issues with that @ w @ Thanks for the giiiiant critique !! XDDD
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06-08-2007, 06:50 AM
I love your art. I love the soft coloring and the style. I noticed a couple areas that could use some work, but they have already been pointed out. But the overall look of the works are just beautiful.
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06-08-2007, 07:10 AM
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second picture: ...I have no idea what you're saying. @ - @;;;
third picture: I SAID IT HAD ISSUES OKAY.. D:
fourth: thanks? XD yeah. hair and stuff. I have a lot of issues with that @ w @ Thanks for the giiiiant critique !! XDDD
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Oh, dear. Well, it's late to try again for the second picture, but if you want I'll give it another shot tomorrow. :3
Yes yes, I know you said the third one had issues. XD I kinda default to telling people the easiest way to fix something because I'm used to critiquing unfinished/semi-finished works. But it's still good to learn short cuts so if you notice something a little late into the drawing, you don't have to redraw EVERYTHING. And you're welcome, I'm very glad you appreciated it. x3
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06-08-2007, 09:43 AM
you have a smooth coloring style... very 'eerie'... :D but beware: don't make it too soft, or it might seem sloppy or too vague ^^
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06-08-2007, 09:52 AM
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My my my, your art is by far very original <3. I never saw anything like it before. Your colors are very soft and delicate =3. I like the style you drew the eyes in as well. It's just great in general n___n. Your art is adorable and quite special (:
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06-09-2007, 07:57 PM
Wow, thank you, nightmare angel! That's really nice : )
@ joke-mus: Thank you, and I try. D:
@ kitsuta: That would be nice. ^^
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06-09-2007, 08:25 PM
Wow parfait your art is amazing and cute ^^ Your colors are soft and shiny^^ I love shiny coloring :)
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06-09-2007, 10:28 PM
thank you!! ^^; I like shiny. :'D
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06-10-2007, 02:36 AM
I noticed one thing that wasn't previously stated, it isn't that noticeable though.
On the third picture: The blue eyed character's shoulder on the left is too far out and should be half of that size.
Overall I think you artwork is extremely adorable it just needs a bit of work and it'll look perfect. Also, as previously stated, I love your colouring style.
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06-10-2007, 06:31 AM
but wouldn't the shoulders be smaller than the head, then? o_o;;
thank you ^^
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06-10-2007, 06:59 AM
Haha you're right, my mistake. Then it's the right shoulder that needs to be extended more.
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06-10-2007, 09:33 AM
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@ kitsuta: That would be nice. ^^
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Oops. I totally got distracted. @ [email protected]; Here's another go, then!
Okay, since words didn't work last time, I did a quick draw-over to illustrate the two ways you could fix this picture. Sorry about the crap lines, I only have a mouse at my disposal ATM.
One thing that I missed earlier, is that the hair on our top left is cutting off the shape of the head. It's a pretty simple fix, just a matter of redrawing that one line. I've drawn in the imaginary head shape in both fixes to show where the head is.
The first fix, which is what I'd prefer, is to just redraw the face on our left side, so that the imagined eye(drawn in the drawover) is in the right place and not too far from with either the face edge or the other eye.
The second fix, which is much less preferred, involves redrawing the eye to move it to the left so that, again, the imagined eye(also drawn in the fix) is in the right place. Sorry about the lack of transparency in this one, I forgot to edit the layer before I closed the program and now I can't change it.
So, does that help?
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06-11-2007, 05:24 AM
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Haha you're right, my mistake. Then it's the right shoulder that needs to be extended more.
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oh! I don't mean for it to actually be that short, of course! XD;; I just didn't feel like drawing the whole thing. ^_^;;
@ Katsuta: Thank you! That helps a lot. ^^
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