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Old 02-15-2009, 11:30 PM

The Road Most Traveled

Wizened widow's winding roads,
lead forward, backward, juxtaposed-
those who'd settle upon her banks,
to those who'd infiltrate her flanks

From one, another; She amuses the line,
as shallow flows give lush their whine
And in the chorus of saintly moans,
do they conquer the widow's woes

Any comments would help greatly. I oft have people complain that they can't understand my writing so I'm working hard to change that problem...

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Old 02-18-2009, 02:32 AM

Are you Hannahlore on deviantART?

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Old 02-18-2009, 02:37 AM

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Are you Hannahlore on deviantART?
Yes I am actually. Why do you ask?

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Old 02-22-2009, 06:20 PM

I googled your work and your dA came up >w<

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Old 02-22-2009, 06:47 PM

Interesting, I liked it. Sorry I can't be of more help. I love reading poetry, but I am bad a writing and criticking it.

 


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