Very well. So now that I have approval to do this allow me to explain:::

1)This is a WORK SHOP thread. Not a CONTEST thread. So no prizes will be awarded.This is bound to change but at a later date and greatly depends on participation

2)This is to assit you in your writing. I will be giving critiques to ALL poems submitted, therefore, it may be a while for me to get to yours. In which case, please be pacient.

3) There will be a new word posted every week or so depending on the amount of poetry I am handed. Obviously, I may not get to every poem in a week, so it may take longer. You may write about that word and that word alone. The front page will be updated with each change, so if you don't see it, go to the first page to be sure. AGAIN PLEASE BE PACIENT. I AM BUT ONE PERSON.

4) THERE WILL BE NO TOLERANCE FOR FLAMMING OF MYSELF OR OTHER POSTERS. IF YOU HAVE A PROBLEM WITH MY CRITIQUE, YOU CAN MESSAGE ME ABOUT IT PERSONALLY. I RESERVE THE RIGHT TO REPORT/BAN YOU FROM MY THREAD IF MY RULES ARE BROKEN. If you don't like my crits, take your poetry elsewhere. You don't need to take my advice; my word isn't law. However, if you challenge me, I will post links/sections of quote from rescorces for you to read.

5) Please, always make sure to have fun and to follow the RULES of the forum. This is suppose to help you, not hinder you.

Word list:::

1) CONSPECTUS- general sketch/outline of a subject; a synopsis
2) GAUNT - Lean & haggard; pinched & grim; desolate
3) Distrait - Divided or withdrawn in attention, especially because of anxiety. -- 02/07/2010

NEW WORD!!!!

distrait \dis-TRAY\ , adjective;
1.
Divided or withdrawn in attention, especially because of anxiety.

Where Was The Screening?

Dreams deamt movie-real, as
touchless figures moved shadow hands,
whispering along my own lost skin.
I thought I knew feeling,
then he took that 2-D pleasure;
spot lighting action the conspectus edited
out, [hips dipped and sounds cried
in this paused frame] beating harder
and harder against me, then

it was against the window.

Funny...
how I forgot the car
-until his sister waltzed up.

I take it no one is interested in participating?

question....we have to use the word u pick somewhere in our poem? and it can b any kind of poem so long as the "word" is in it, yes?

i want to participate but i'm gonna wait a week until the word changes. i no like that word. it also depends on if i end up actually having time or not. i'd really like it if there wasn't a word of the week thing though, and instead just let it be a thread for people to post any poetry they wrote so it can get critiqued. but do whatever you want i guess

Originally Posted by Dragons_Willow

question....we have to use the word u pick somewhere in our poem? and it can b any kind of poem so long as the "word" is in it, yes?

Yes any type of poem so long as the word given is used. :)

Originally Posted by amulet

i want to participate but i'm gonna wait a week until the word changes. i no like that word. it also depends on if i end up actually having time or not. i'd really like it if there wasn't a word of the week thing though, and instead just let it be a thread for people to post any poetry they wrote so it can get critiqued. but do whatever you want i guess

See I talked to a mod about doing that-- opening up a critique thread-- but I was told that I wouldn't be allowed because of the double posting thing. Here, actually I'll give you link to the thread where I asked about it so you could understand their reasoning of why I can't. I don't agree with their decision, myself, but I can't go against it either...

Question About The Poetry Forum
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NEW WORD!!!
GAUNT - Lean & haggard; pinched & grim; desolate

no takers?

Sorry for the absence. I've had a lot happen in a very short period of time. Let's get this back up and running shall we?

I will bump you!

Lovers, please do not bump. While you are allowed to double post if your thread has fallen off of the front page, your post must be on topic. Bumping is not allowed on Menewsha.

Oh, ops. Well... Anyone willing try out the word? It's really not a hard one.

If you guys would post more and be active in my Threads ((My Challenge)) I'll be able to get more gold and will then be convinced that you guys want this and I'll do an ACTUAL CONTEST with PRIZES.
*HINT HINT*

*sigh*

I'll participate. It seems interesting. I will post something tomorrow though, I need to go to sleep right now

I'd love to participate! I would be ecstatic if you could read my poetry thread, too! ^^

Well then start writing on the work I've posted. I figure since no ones used it, I'll leave it up there. SO ON WITH IT!. XD

Originally Posted by Lovers Never Tell

Oh, ops. Well... Anyone willing try out the word? It's really not a hard one.

If you guys would post more and be active in my Threads ((My Challenge)) I'll be able to get more gold and will then be convinced that you guys want this and I'll do an ACTUAL CONTEST with PRIZES.
*HINT HINT*

*Sigh*


Still waiting for that participation guys...

What happened to my peoples??? And my promised poems??????

You misspelled the words assist and patient in your first post. I don't mean to come off as rude, but some people might not take you seriously if it looks like you don't edit correctly or care for proper spelling. Sounds like a fun idea though, I may be back and try it out soon :D

Wow....CONSPECTUS....interesting word, never head of it but....hmmmmmmmmm


Knocking door to door
a midnight walk in my mind

the doors all slammed tight
conspectus are my thoughts
my world a little gaunt

the sun shines through my window
the shadows grudge the light
and I just stand and linger
and taunt the specks of dust


O_o.....wow. I think it's crap, I probaly didn't even use the word right

Awesome!! YAY! Okays. So I'll start the critiques now. And thank you for noticing those person that is now banned... :)

Originally Posted by TanaChan

Wow....CONSPECTUS....interesting word, never head of it but....hmmmmmmmmm


Knocking door to door
a midnight walk in my mind How is this in your mind? You should develop this more to give a better picture.

the doors all slammed tight Why are they slammed?
conspectus are my thoughts why?
my world a little gaunt Nice, but how is it gaunt?

the sun shines through my windowThere was a window? So you're in a room? You should make this a little more apparent.
the shadows grudge the lightGoing from the first line to this one is off. It's like you're missing something here.
and I just stand and linger Why?
and taunt the specks of dust Why?


O_o.....wow. I think it's crap, I probaly didn't even use the word right

No, you're fine. It's a very good beginning. lol. As all poetry does, it just needs fine tuning is all. Alright. SO! All we need is to work on how to SHOW and not TELL what's going on. You want to paint a picture with words not just tell the story.

Knocking door to door
a midnight walk in my mind- How is this in your mind? You should develop this more to give a better picture.

the doors all slammed tight- Why are they slammed?
conspectus are my thoughts -why?
my world a little gaunt -Nice, but how is it gaunt?

the sun shines through my window-There was a window? So you're in a room? You should make this a little more apparent.
the shadows grudge the light-Going from the first line to this one is off. It's like you're missing something here.
and I just stand and linger- Why?
and taunt the specks of dust- Why?

When I write, I just write. It just simply comes out that way. And I'm a tad insane. i've got one poem titled Laugh it frightens people......I have no clue where that one came from

I'll be back when I get off work.....I'll answer the questions then



in all actuality, I don't ever really think about why I write something, it jsut usualy comes out that way. I've got a thread in here that I post my poems in.

There Was No One Listening

Her plate became nothing,
no; nothing more
than a place to catch
syllabic precipitate
that once were words,
but turned
to nothing
but mist fading beyond
even a conspectus
of meaning.

Originally Posted by TanaChan

When I write, I just write. It just simply comes out that way. And I'm a tad insane. i've got one poem titled Laugh it frightens people......I have no clue where that one came from

I'll be back when I get off work.....I'll answer the questions then



in all actuality, I don't ever really think about why I write something, it jsut usualy comes out that way. I've got a thread in here that I post my poems in.

Well you shouldn't be answering the questions to me. You should be answering them in your poem. I didn't ask those for your life's story. They're there because they're missing in your poem and are needed parts in them. I don't care if you're crazy. Most writer's are and very few live long, fullfilling lives because of it. Just comes with the job.

Originally Posted by Mirana

There Was No One Listening

Her plate became nothing, dash, not comma. Plate? What do you mean by that?
no;comma, not semi nothing more
than a place to catch
syllabic precipitate precipitation***
that once were words,
but turned
to nothing
but mist fading beyond
even a conspectus
of meaning.

I feel you used the word "nothing" too much and with all the other stronger words, I believe you can use a thesuarus to find something else... Maybe expand on the idea of this seeing as it comes off incomplete? Other than that, why the color for the text? Does it hold some kind of meaning? If not, I'd suggest taking it off as it would confuse me.

Hmm... nothing else I can find to nit-pick at. :)

How do I delete a post?