Alice was still in shock, she stared in horror at the vampire's hand and quickly scurried backwards. She ran out the door of the dorm, trying to get as far from the vampire as possible.

rose sighed and disapeard into darkness to reappear in front of her holding her jacket "you forgot this.."

she walks in the school she is a beautiful girl she goes to her first class math of course after class she hears something she sees two girls doing something

Originally Posted by xserenityxninax

she walks in the school she is a beautiful girl she goes to her first class math of course after class she hears something she sees two girls doing something

[[[...............
could you be more illiterate.....]]]

[[can we continue pwease? D:]]

Alice took the jacket cautiously, and then put it on, feeling a little more secure. 'Are you going to hurt me...?' she whispered, slightly cowering against the wall.

rose smiled and giggled "if i wanted to hurt u i would have done it wile i had u wraped around my fingger- she gave a cute wink to her

A girl comes in the school she is new here she lives on her own her parents were killed she is a smart girl that comes from a rich family she is rich and smart she is in her math class she is like there for about 2 hours she goes to her next class but she goes outside for a while and draws for a long time she draws a girl in watching the moon she is a beautiful girl than she goes back in the school than she walks in the hall she looks at the other hall and sees girls talking

Originally Posted by xserenityxninax

A girl comes in the school she is new here she lives on her own her parents were killed she is a smart girl that comes from a rich family she is rich and smart she is in her math class she is like there for about 2 hours she goes to her next class but she goes outside for a while and draws for a long time she draws a girl in watching the moon she is a beautiful girl than she goes back in the school than she walks in the hall she looks at the other hall and sees girls talking

hun when u rp you dont just make a list of what she did..

bad: she went to school she went the eat she went to bed she woke up she saw people

good:she came to the school sentce [reson for coming] wile there she went to go get some food b/c she was hungry. she felt tierd so she went to bed..the next morning she work up to find 2 girl outside her window]..see what im saying?

(well no she went outside for hours and she lives alone with out her family she is a rich family and smart as well and she might having that you guys will not know i would finish but you guys are hurting my feelings about my roleplaying)

[sweet heart ur makeing a list instead of narrating thats not how it works ok?]

(my character is dumb that means she can't speak and in my other roleplaying i write alot more than this)

speaking has nothign to do with it..
u dont go
shes here
she went there
she talked to this person
she went and did this

thats not how it works...

(look she is a sad girl ok deal with it i'm talking to my bf on the phone)

IM NOT TALKING ABOUT UR CHARACTER! >.<

(oh srry than)

(lol)

When you type, you should at least use punctuation. It makes your role playing a little easier to understand. Right now I have no idea what you're talking about. XD

(teeheeheee)

(@serenity: Its a story. You write about your character as if it is a story. Its not a script. You have to make sense. Like in a book. We're just trying to help you out we're not teasing you)

(Ah, well. Move on with the role play and let her try again.)

Originally Posted by Ryuusei

(Ah, well. Move on with the role play and let her try again.)

[[btw, are you going to join? ^^]]

Alice chuckled a little, not because of the humour but because she was afraid of getting on the wrong side of the vampire. 'Oh, by the way, I didn't get your name...I think...' she said, laughing awkwardly.

she lughed "its rose..and yours?"

(Probably not. I've never tried before, so I think I'll just watch for now. :3)

'Alice...hahhaha...hehheh...heh...' She looked down at the floor awkwardly, then back up at Rose. 'So.......do you want to grab a bite to eat....? Wait! I mean - not a bite, um, um.... just.... you know, like eat something, if you're hungry, if you do eat, human stuff.... not that you're human or anything but.....'
Alice let her sentence trail into a disaster, hoping she didn't offend Rose. She smiled worried at the vampire, hoping she didn't get another bite very soon.

rose giggled "calm down..im not going to hurt u..and yes i eat "human" food" she grind