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Old 11-11-2011, 02:27 AM

This is a poem I made, or a song, whatever one it falls more into. But I'd really appreiciate some feedback :)

Ready or not
here it comes
Don't hide your face
Or fear your tears
This is it
How it's gonna be

I wanna see your face
And feel your embrace
Kiss away my tears
And vanquish all my fears

I wanna see your face
And feel your embrace
Lets go back
And get on track

Don't say goodbye

All the smiles
And things you did
I never stopped caring
even when you did

I wanna see your face
and feel your embrace
Kiss away my tears
and vanquish all my fears

I wanna see your face
And feel your embrace
Baby lets go back
and get on track

Don't say goodbye. (Goodbye)

Ready or not
Here it comes
Don't hide your face
Or fear your tears
This is it
How it's gonna be

But baby please
I don't wanna hear goodbye

I'm not ready
Don't want it to come
I'm hiding my face
I'm scared to cry
But this is it
Our final goodbye

Medusa Flame
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Old 07-13-2012, 10:55 PM

Tokyo Moon this is a lovely free verse poem song thingy but is is defiantly inspirational.
I hope you write more.

Yuuki Sena
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Old 08-26-2012, 01:25 AM

It's good. Like, Medusa Flame said I hope you write more. I have my own collection of poems too, but haven't gotten any replies. :( I love your poem/song and I really hope you write more. XD

 


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