Well, I like to write poems. And I love getting feedback.
So please read and comment! ^^
I'll add more as I write, but I'll start with one of my favorites that is already written.


Gum and Puppet Strings

She smiles wickedly at you,
You turn your head to hide the tears.
Every time she looks at you,
She sees straight to your greatest fears.

She draws a ribbon on your arm,
And licks the blood as it falls.
She sends a shiver down your spine,
And takes a hammer to your walls.

She seals up the wound with gum,
Her venom kisses take the pain.
Like a addict to a drug,
You need her there to keep you sane.

Someone offers you a cure,
But her promise takes it back.
The more you look at what she has,
The more you notice what you lack.

She steals kisses and respect,
Her whispered words are like a drug.
And as your sorrows reach her ear,
Her only reaction is a shrug.


The more she pushed you away,
The more it makes you stay around.
She pulls your puppet strings in close,
Until around her you are wound.

i have the odd urge to punch this person u speak of. she sounds quite nasty. anway....i would say all you need is some creative tweaking and to check your grammar. other than that, i'd say it's purdy awesome. :angel: read mine?

Yes, my grammar does tend to get thrown out the window when I write poetry. :sweat:
You wanted to punch her? D: I'm glad I inspired so much emotion though.
Thanks so much for reading my poem!