10-06-2009, 10:03 PM
Most of your poems lack the general poetic devices. You need better imagry and grammer is sorely needed so the reader knows where one thought ends and the other begins. Also, your last few are not really poems. They're just sentences. You need line breaks otherwise their nothing but paragraphs. Poetry has form even if it's free verse. You have a talent, you really do, now make it better.
lol.
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