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Old 09-01-2012, 02:03 AM

Especially now that I'm in creative writing class and write for at least 50 minutes in a school day, if not more, this thread may be seeing a lot of use, which is cool, right? .w.

So with this first post, I'll plop in my first poem, which I think is untitled, but could totally be titled. I don't know.


What's it like to know
You've thrown me to the stone.
You've torn away my flesh and bone
And left me only organs.
They all work fine alone,
But will never cooperate again.
Uncased, they lay in the sun.
Baking and attracting the hens.
They peck at me with fervor,
But by now I've fallen asleep
I suppose you don't know what you were thinking.
I suppose you thought no one would know?

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Old 09-03-2012, 05:59 PM

I Go to Seek a Great Perhaps
What will happen when we're done?
When we've shuffled off the course?
Perhaps the world restarts itself
or maybe we just fall asleep?
No one ever comes back from
the land just past the darkest veil.
Whatever we wish to believe,
It's all just myth until we see
What lies beyond the stony grave.

(jeeesus christ my iambic pentameter needs some work...)

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Old 09-22-2012, 09:51 PM

nicee poems !!
by the way i have suggestion for a title for your first poem BROKEN
well this is just a suggestion :D
and i just love your first poem it's just plainly awesome

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Old 09-23-2012, 04:15 PM

thanks deary~ and speaking of poetry, i have a new one~

for sadako
twelve years,
your run at life was much too short
i wonder if i had met you,
would i have seen the spark in your eyes til' the final days?
i pray to god that i would
every time we breath, we exhale a little of "me" out
and a little of "them" back in.
so you're a part of me,
but i never got to be a part of you.
your spirit and soul
still live on, little sadako
i'll see you on the wings
of the one thousandth paper crane.

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Old 09-24-2012, 08:07 AM

awwwwww..... :') 1000 cranes i love that story <3
make some more something about happiness or love
>.< your poems are heart warming

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Old 09-26-2012, 08:04 AM

and can i ask you for a favor.. as u are quite a expert in poetry can plz see mine
http://www.menewsha.com/forum/art/li...her-poems.html
and tell if i can improve it!!!

THANKS

 


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