Hello, lovely poetry. There's so much good stuff on here, it's hard to choose who I should pick for the paper's spotlight >_<

Good lord! Can it be? Actual poetry with imagery O_O?

Thank you so much Saito for selecting me! I am glad you were able to choose one; Mizu is one of my favorites. ^^ <3

Azu, yeah it is O.O! I try to make my poems poetic, if that makes sense. XD <3 I try to use interesting images that normally don't go together, or use it in a new way. ^^ <3

But, I have some new poems to share! <3

The Walls that Keep Me

I live in a box made of tinted glass -
Yesterday I felt strong enough to chip away
At the darkness that kept me.

But upon the hour, I begin to regret -
Living in my tiny world of dark glass
Seeing the world in overcast -

I hid away.

Finally opening the sleek walls that
Bathed me in their ink -
Life has preyed upon me.

Digesting the forbidden Fruit of Optimism -
Hope lodged itself inside my mind
And as malignant tumors do

Hope threaded through my veins.

How foolish I am for chipping away
At the dark skies of my earth
Filling them with joy!

But I caress the edge of this joy blade -
Sharp and swift mirroring his Hope partner,
Slicing the outlines of the

Boundries to Paradise.

So today, I feel the burn of dancing upon
The crevices of Love - sinking deep within their
Dark hollowed parts.

What was once true, is now uncertain -
Flirting with hope never made clear
How much you mean to me.

(I lost)

Yeah, lol..Now I just need to wait till the paper gets out...if it ever does..

HELLO BIG BROTHER, THANKS FOR WATCHING

Watch the little chicks, as they cluck
For more pearls (let us instead lay them
Before SWINE).

For those who preen like stuffed
Ducks: live in that makebelieveland
(Full of MONEY).

Capitalism before freedom (because
Words are much like propaganda and
To EXPRESS anything

More than an outer greed for more
Pearls and GOLD is something part
Of crazy). So -

Today they stitch my mouth closed.(PRAY
I become a silent lamb) For I remain a
Wolf with words

Dressed in Chick's clothing.

I tried to send a comprehensive critique, but it wouldn't let me. I had pointed out parts that I loved, Wrong Line and Loveless specifically. What I wanted to know is as far as your line breaks. I want to know why you finish some stanzas in the beginning of the following one. I don't see the tie ins. Otherwise, I enjoyed most of your work.

Ah well it's just a style that I am messing around with. While I break it mid sentence, it sort of starts a new idea I guess? XD;;

Which poems did you have a particular issue with this break?

The Loveless

I'll tell you about the
Loveless that exist in my
Heart. They are the tiny
Beings formed from the

Crusts of Time. Trying to
Snatch out my feelings as they
Escape out of the bottle I
Keep in my left shoe.


And the like. Not so much a problem, just a question.