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Old 11-06-2007, 02:48 AM

This is a fanfic based on the anime yuyu hakusho, and I also added two of my own characters in it. I started writing it a long time ago, and even though I'm not really into anime or manga anymore, I feel the need to finish it. Here's the first chapter. Constructive critizism welcome.

This first chapter isn't mature at all, though later on it will be, so I'll put the warning up once I post the second chapter.


Chapter 1

The rain needled through the sky, landing on pavement, forming puddles of mud in the grass, tapping away listlessly on the roofs and windows of the houses along Ocean Ave. Jessica sat in her favorite blue cushioned bench and looked out her bedroom window. It had been raining for two days straight, and the gloomy weather did nothing to improve her mood. Her chin was cupped in her hand as she leaned her elbow on the window sill, gazing out at the foggy scenery. The multiple specks of water blurred the vision out of the window even furthur. The thought of him lingered in the back of her mind as she glared through the window at the weather. Everything about him drifted through her mind, his face, his name, everything that her eyes had seen him do...She saw everything, and ever since she first saw him,she knew,she thought, these eyes will never see the same. His name...A name greater than the devil himself, a name that dare not cross almost anyone's lips, humans, demons, and immortals alike. A name that would tear your heart apart just thinking about how the name itself affected her life. The name of the nightmare, the name of a demon. His name was Akujin.

The sound of a door slamming floated in from downstairs. The quick sound that broke the silence made Jessica jump alittle and look towards her bedroom door, which led into a hallway that ended with the stairs.She knew it was just her mother coming home from work.She sneered at the door and looked back towards the weather abused window.Jessica was furious with her mother at the moment. Because of the harsh weather conditions,she was forbidden by her mother to go outside, which meant she couldn't watch Akujin. Jessica daydreamed he'd be doing something fantastic and taintalizing in those dark alleyways, those narrow store-crowded streets, those tiny apartments with so many helpless victims. And such weather for such actions.

Jessica folded her arms and sighed. Life's a bitch. But she had this philosphy, 'life's not that much of a bitch if you don't feed it bones.' Which basically meant, life doesn't have to be so bad as long as you don't give it reasons to. With this thought she stepped down from the bench and made her way over to her closet, opening it,she pulled out your raincoat, misc items jingling in it's pockets. She closed the closet door, and walked over to her dresser. She opened the bottom drawer and after awhile of fumbling through all of her clothes, she pulled out a 8x5 black binded notebook with a silver cover, it was unlabeled. She was going to sneak out.

Jessica waited by her door for a full five minutes, clutching her notebook to her chest, wearing her black raincoat.She had listened to her mother walk up the stairs and heard the door close to her bedroom down the hall. Jessica now decided it was time to move. She slowly opened her bedroom door, trying to make as little sound as possible. She crept down the hallway as sneaky as possible, the socks on her feet acting as a muffler to lessen the sound against the hard wood floors. As she walked by her mothers room she could hear her voice, she stopped to listen. "...And tell Nigel and Betty that I want that blue print in tommorrow on my desk and make sure that..."Jessica rolled your eyes and kept walking. Work. She thought to herself as she quietly decended the staircase, though she knew it most likely didn't matter, her mother was too into her conversation to hear the sound of feet.

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Old 11-06-2007, 02:53 AM

At the end of the staircase she faced the pearl white front door, to the far right lay her school shoes, next to them was her worn down sneakers. She trotted up to them and quickly slipped on the sneakers, still clutching ahold of her silver notebook. She felt in her pockets to make sure her camera was there. She made her way back to the front door and grasped the brass handle, slowly, she opened the door. She was met with a slight rush of cold breeze and the raindrops as she slipped out the door and quietly shut it, not wanting to take any chances.

Jessica broke into a run down her driveway, she turned left and dashed along the sidewalk. The sloppy sound of water splooshing up from her shoes and the whistle of icy wind rung in her ears.She tucked your notebook into the coat pocket to prevent it from getting water damaged.

She ran down the sidewalk, all the way down out of her suburban area into the narrow streets of her town, shops side by side of each other, many had some spaces in between each other, which made even smaller and narrower streets. These were alleyways, many of which she was all too familiar of. It was in most of these alleyways Jessica watched and observed Akujin commit these vicious crimes on the human race.She stopped running for a moment to catch her breath.She sniffed a little and looked around, the rain wasn't going to let up any time soon, which made it difficult for her to see a far distance, in which case, up the street.

But she knew the usually busy town was now mostly vacant on the streets, everyone was inside their houses or apartments, keeping away from the bitter cold weather.She sniffled again, trying to get that tingly feeling in her sinuses as she turned around.

Whether she sensed demons or just trouble, she wasn't sure, but when she was young, around eight, she noticed that she'd get that feeling like your about to sneeze, but she never could.

As she grew older,she realized from reading the newspaper her mom leaves on the table when she leaves for work, and from watching the news channel at night, everyplace she had that feeling, something fatal happened, usually demon related. Years went on and she tracked wherever she got this feeling, and sure enough an accident always happened.

Jessica kept looking around, moving every which way a bit, trying to pick up something.She used this odd sixth sense of hers to find Akujin, though she was always on her guard, she found out the hard way that her nose doesn't always lead her to Akujin.

Walking alittle further up the street, still looking around every which way, she noticed that most of the stores were closed, but wasn't suprised. She stepped down form the sidewalk and crossed the street,she splashed through the little river flowing quickly through the gutters as she jumped up on the other sidewalk and splashed into a puddle. To any person that looked out their window,she was just another stupid kid, playing in the rain and bound to catch a cold. But she knew what she was really doing. Searching. And just playing off while she looked for trouble, literally.

Jessica was beginning to walk down the sidewalk again when something suddenly stopped her. She felt the slightest tingle in between her eyes.She turned to her left, towards the street, nothing.She turned to her right, the sensation grew. Not exactly to her suprise,she was looking at an alley way.

She looked up at the two buildings that made the alley way. Molly's Shoe Shop and the local post office.She sniffled again and snuck into the alley, it wasn't the narrowest, but just enough for a one way street for a small car to drive through.She gazed around the alley; Crates, boxes, trashcans; The usual of what you would find in a common alley.

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Old 11-06-2007, 02:55 AM

Jessica scooted over the the left and pressed herself against the alley wall, which a slight hangover from the roof sheilded her from the rain. She pulled out her notebook, unclipped the pen from the top and began writing 'Alleyway between Molly's Shoe Shop and Post Office. Roughly 6:30 pm. At medium. Robbery or murder perhaps?' Reclipping the pen back the the notebook, it was folded closed and stuck back into her raincoat.

Keeping to the building wall,she squatted down alittle and began to creep her way down the alley.She stopped every now and then to listen for any sounds. All she could hear was the rain pounding away on the trashcan lids and wooden boxes, and the dribble of water colliding with the soggy ground as it poured off the roofs overhang. She kept close to the wall, to make sure whatever she wanted to see didn't see her first as she gave tiny leap over a puddle that had a half eaten dead rat in it.

Jessica sighed and looked at the crates in front of her, they were stacked pyrimid style against the wall.She was too afraid to go around the crates, she never did, always a fear of being spotted if she didn't keep close to the wall.She had no choice but to climb over them.She mumbled quietly to herself about how she hated these little obstacles as she carefully lifted herself onto the lowest crate. The wood was soggy and rotting,she gave a grimace as she set her hands on the edge of the second crate that was higher than the one she were on now.Jessica began to pull herself up when she heard a noise. She froze.

It was coming from behind her.

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Old 11-06-2007, 02:58 AM

I'll post the second chapter once I get some reviews for chapter one. xD So I'm not throwing a novel on here all at once, hopefully more people will read it that way.

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Old 11-06-2007, 02:22 PM

Woo hoo xD Chapter 2!

Chapter 2

She immediately panicked, and flung herself around to gaze at whatever made that noise. Her breath was fast and she could feel her heart hamemering in her chest. Her eyes flicked as she turned and the light blue irses fell upon a pale, bear chest.

Her breath caught in her throat, she was too afraid to look up at the face, but as she had just thought that, she did it. Her eyes trailed up the falwless, pale skin of the person, and landed on the face of a demon.

It wasn’t Akujin, and with this you would think she would heave a sigh of relief. But she didn’t. It was Kuronue, the bat demon. One of Akujin’s partners in crime. His river blue eyes seemed to peirce through her soul, and she suddenly felt violated. It was only then that she remembered she was holding her breath. She let out a puff of air, and as she did so, it seemed to give her body functions back. She began to shake violently. Not totally from fear, though that was part of it. As surely anyone would shake in the presence of a demon, but form also excitement, like she had just spotted a celebrity. Could it be, the real Kuronue theif lord standing in front of her? Jessica opened her mouth, but nothing came out of it. It seemed like the minutes dragged out before the demon thief finally spoke, though in reality, it was only a few seconds.

“What is a little girl doing out here all by herself?” his voice was casual, but Jessica’s imagination sensed some sort of a threat in it.

“Looking at something.”

“Anything interesting?”

“Not really…” she trailed off for a moment. Did he know what she was doing? What she was looking for? She hoped not. It would be horrible if he could read, or even understand her confusing mind. Atleast she thought it was confusing.

“Oh..”he said nonchalantly, sort of trailing off. He had his arms crossed across his chest as he took a few casual steps off to the side of her, peeking around the rotting boxes. He looked back at her and smiled. “Are you looking for someone?”

“No..” Jessica added hesitantly

He kept pushing, “A friend? Mother?”


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Old 11-06-2007, 02:22 PM

Jessica had suddenly come to a realization of what he was talking about. She had been right, Akujin was just around the corner, and was probably commiting murder and worse to whoever his victim was. She gave a slight smile on her lips, and wanted to jump for joy knowing that she has succeeded in finding him again, but she stopped herself, reminded that now she couldn’t take pictures that she had been caught. She coughed a little to clear her throat. Maybe if they talked loud enough, he would come over… Jessica wanted nothing more.

“Well, I was actually looking for a demon.” She said a little louder then she should of, she hoped that he had heard her, if he was still there anyway. She looked at Kuronue and controlled the urge to look behind her, as he would surely then figure out what’s up.

But Kuronue didn’t know she was talking about Akujin. He smiled, “Well, isn’t that just the stupidest thing in the world to do? Search for a demon?” he began to take a few steps to the side of her again, he was circling her. “What are you, some aspiring demon hunter.” His last sentence was saracastic, as he frequently ran into these wannabe “demon hunters”. In the end they ended up being demon dinner.

But Jessica shook her head, “No. I..I came here to take pictures.” She said, and as if to prove she wasn’t lieing, she held up the camera that was swinging from her neck. Kuronue stared at her for a moment, taking in what he just heard and deciding if she was being serious. What kind of little girl went around and took pictures of demons? A strange, stupid, one at that. He thought for a moment, then smiled. If indeed this girl was as odd as he thought, then he should have no problem luring her in. “Any particular demon, perhaps?” he automatically assumed it wasn’t him, as she wasn’t snapping away her camera, it was obvious from the look of surprise on her face that she had not planned to see him here.

“Well…” Jessica began. She wasn’t sure if she should tell him who she’s searching for, what if he prevents her form ever seeing him again? But then again, by hearing his name, Akujin could just walk right over here. Jessica smiled inside and took her chances, before giving herself more time to think she blurted out the answer, “Akujin.”

Kuronue stopped his pacing and observed her again. Was she serious? The Master? Was that the demon she was searching for? Kuronue had assumed an answer like Youko Kurama, as he was the one who was killing a middle-aged woman that was obviously from out of town, on the other side of the crates, though he was still yards away from where Kuronue and Jessica where now. Kuronue let out a laugh. It made Jessica jump, as she had never heard a demon laugh before. It was different from a humans, more cunning and not as loud. Jessica began to shiver again. The rain was still coming down, but it had begun to pick up in these past few minutes, and it was now pouring.

Jessica had always wanted to meet a demon, and even this one wasn’t her all-time favorite one, alas, it was still a demon. She took advantage of the time Kuronue was using to compose himself to observe him, taking in his physical appearance to jot down in her journal, which was safely hidden under her rain coat.



And that's all of chapter 2 xD chapter 3 coming soon

 


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