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Old 05-16-2007, 02:28 AM

Let the waves crash over us
Washing the pain of the past away…
It has been too long since I felt your arms…
“I’ll never let you go astray”
Crash.
Let the moonlight fill us
Dispelling all our fears
It has been to long since last I heard…
“I just want to hold you dear.”
Crash.
Let the Kestrals inspire us
Lighting an untrodden path
It has been to long since last I saw…
“Oh you’re so lovely when you laugh.”
Crash.
Let the dawn move us
Traveling down those forgotten roads.
It has been far too long since last you said…
“Let’s take that risk, and see what the future holds.”
Crash.
Let the end renew us…
Instilling a brand new light…
I never thought I’d hear those words…
“It’s you whom I’ll spend my life.”
Crash.

By: Jennifer A.

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Old 05-16-2007, 03:03 PM

I liked that, it was very intuitive. I like the use of repition in the crash. Good Job^^

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Old 05-17-2007, 06:46 PM

Very nice... I guess i liked the 'story' it's telling. Yes, I do realize my choice in words, well, sucks.

 


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