SilverPhoenyx
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11-02-2010, 09:00 AM
Thank you.
So what do I do now, just roll?
I saw the form, but I have never rolled dice on here before.
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Seito
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11-02-2010, 09:00 AM
Well not so much green anymore. I say enter it and see what Daria/Sizzla say? Ice cream :drool:
@silver yup. Just use the form. The dice coding is already there.
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Xaevan
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11-02-2010, 09:01 AM
Just use the rolling dice form on the front, Silver. =D
All you need in this game is the [dice][/dice] codes.
@Seito:
I am also entering for Seiki's avatar contest!
After this, I'm trying out the ghost one. xD
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Seito
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11-02-2010, 09:02 AM
Oooo good luck Iro! Ghost one should be fun. xD
*munches* What does Iro think of story? *points to above post in spoiler tags*
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Swordtear
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11-02-2010, 09:03 AM
@Seito-Will do xDD
I'll probably be spending part of summer alone in the house for a few weeks in which I plan to learn how to cook things hahaha!
Ooh...I want to read more <3
Just a few grammer errors like :
horsed = hoarsed
And the part "It sounded like an empty promised to her"...I'm not sure if it's talking about Ayame,Tier or Asher *u* (I think Asher but it mentions "her"
But looking good! :D
@Iro-I wonder if it applies to stores here in Australia hahaha...would be super nice if it did though *u*!
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SilverPhoenyx
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11-02-2010, 09:03 AM
@Seito
Let's Roll some dice!
I'm on Monster Level:
The 6-sided dice lands on 1
Thank you.
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The Whitewolf Shaman
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11-02-2010, 09:05 AM
OMG!!! Seito's nekkid!
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Seito
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11-02-2010, 09:06 AM
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Originally Posted by Swordtear
@Seito-Will do xDD
I'll probably be spending part of summer alone in the house for a few weeks in which I plan to learn how to cook things hahaha!
Ooh...I want to read more <3
Just a few grammer errors like :
horsed = hoarsed
And the part "It sounded like an empty promised to her"...I'm not sure if it's talking about Ayame,Tier or Asher *u* (I think Asher but it mentions "her"
But looking good! :D
@Iro-I wonder if it applies to stores here in Australia hahaha...would be super nice if it did though *u*!
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Cooking! <3
Actually I hate cooking. I like eating. XD
Ooo I knew that was spelled wrong.
I shall make that clear (it's actually referring to Ayame, but I know why that's confusing, but not the technical term. I think it's one of those third person point of views variation).
@whitewolf
Nekkid? Nonsense!
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Swordtear
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11-02-2010, 09:09 AM
@Seito-Hahaha same here! *loves to eat*
Ooh...now I get it! *u*
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Seito
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11-02-2010, 09:10 AM
Yeah eating is fun. xD But I'm a picky eater too... which makes it difficult. @.@ *shot*
hehe I shall post more whenever I think of how to write the rest. *dies*
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Xaevan
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11-02-2010, 09:11 AM
@Swordtear:
I hope so, Sword! It's Baskin (31) Robbins, after all *w*
@Seito:
Here's my rewriting? Yours is actually okay, but this is just my reading preference so it sounds and flow better, I think? xD
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“Asher.”
Asher snapped open his green eyes. Looking up, he saw a girl with long, brown hair standing before him, her red eyes filled with concern. In her hands nestled a cup of tea which she handed to him as she moved to sit next to him on the couch.
“Ayame,” he greeted. His voice sounded scratchy and hoarse.
Ayame frowned at the sound of his voice. “Are you alright?” she asked.
Asher closed his eyes again. His grip tightened around the cup. He could recall everything that happened in the last 27 hours. Asher could still hear the blood pounding in his ears and feel the cool metal pressed against the back of his head. He wasn’t sure when he'd managed to stop shaking. Even though he was now safe, the fear was still there, fresh as ever, and he couldn’t help but jump at the shadows and flinch at the slightest touch.
Ayame bit her lip at the lack of response. “They can’t hurt you any more, Asher,” she said softly. “Tier is down at the station making sure of that.” It sounded like an empty promised to her. It partly was. Even if Tier did manage to make sure those criminals were locked away for good, it didn’t mean someone else was not going to come along. It was the price of being who they are, the price that Asher had to pay for the simple act of associating himself with her. Ayame flinched at the thought. She would have to break the bubble that Asher was living in. Reality was cruel.
“Why?” he finally asked, staring blankly at the untouched cup of tea.
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@The Whitewolf Shama:
LOL!
I like how your avatar looks like it's just done throwing up. xDD
Last edited by Xaevan; 11-02-2010 at 09:14 AM..
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Seito
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11-02-2010, 09:12 AM
*munches on Iro* <33
Thank you <3
*opens another word doc to compare* xD <3
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Xaevan
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11-02-2010, 09:13 AM
Did a few more edits of certain typos I just noticed. xD
You're welcome, Seisei!
EDIT:
If you have any questions why I did the changes I did, feel free to ask. |3
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SilverPhoenyx
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11-02-2010, 09:13 AM
So now I have to wait to roll again?
I will never make it to level 5 if this ends in four days.
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Xaevan
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11-02-2010, 09:14 AM
The next roll is in 45 minutes, Silver. :D
That's when the 8 hour period resets.
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Seito
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11-02-2010, 09:16 AM
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Originally Posted by Xaevan
Did a few more edits of certain typos I just noticed. xD
You're welcome, Seisei!
EDIT:
If you have any questions why I did the changes I did, feel free to ask. |3
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<33 Will do Will do. Seito hasn't had anyone to give proper feedback in a long time. Then Seito took all math and physics classes and hasn't touched a single English class since. Writing has fail since then. Makes Seito sad.
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Originally Posted by SilverPhoenyx
So now I have to wait to roll again?
I will never make it to level 5 if this ends in four days.
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Yes but as Xaevan mentioned, the next one resets in 45 minutes.
After the 45 minutes you'll have to wait another 8 hours from there until you can roll again.
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ToriKat
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11-02-2010, 09:18 AM
Seito:
Let's Roll some dice!
I'm on Monster Level: 1
The 6-sided dice lands on 4
My sign up form should be right now. xD
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Seito
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11-02-2010, 09:20 AM
.... It has just occurred to Seito that the time period resets in 40 minutes.
*headdesk*
Seito is off to shower. Shall be right back. >>
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Xaevan
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11-02-2010, 09:21 AM
*explains anyway cause Xae felt like it* xD
At the start of your story there, you used very short sentences which are really choppy and doesn't flow well when read. It feels a little disjointed and gives off the 'rushed' feeling, that was why I joined a few sentences there which could be joined.
In the later parts, I left them alone, because Asher's thoughts and feelings were meant to be disjointed, showing that he was still in panic and fear.
And you typed in "horsed", not "hoarse". xD
And the "It partly was." I changed into that so it follows the previous sentence, to associate. Something like, "It is ice-cream. It is cold."
Rather than something like, "It is ice-cream. The ice-cream is very cold."
Have a good shower, Seisei! xD
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Seito
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11-02-2010, 09:24 AM
*has stopped to read your post* xD
I utterly love you Iro. <33 You basically fixed what was originally bugging me to begin with!
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Xaevan
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11-02-2010, 09:26 AM
Glad to have helped! \o/
I used to beta, but stopped because I became really busy. Glad to be able to do so again (sort of). xD
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Swordtear
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11-02-2010, 09:33 AM
Ooh..go Iro! <3
*turns into a pumpkin head* xDDD
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Xaevan
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11-02-2010, 09:34 AM
*noms on Sword's head*
Mmmm.... Pumpkin. |3
I want to try pumpkin pie someday! :eager:
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Squidoo
Have you seen my brain?
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11-02-2010, 09:41 AM
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Originally Posted by Seito
Now that I have all of your attention
This is last warning from me. After this I won't breath a word and you will suffer the consequences.
1) All forms must be complete before the end of the event. Today would be preferred.
2) Make sure your form is complete. If you have nothing written in the prize level, you will receive nothing. Those of you waiting for the rest of the event commons have no excuse. They're out. Go choose.
3) Make sure your links are up to date today. With the new commons out, pages have shifted. Update them. Update them in your original form post. It's linked in the Hunter Post
4) Make sure you have a gender. If you're a female avi wanting a female/unisex items, tell me that, vice versa for males. If you do not have a gender, you will receive a random gender of the said item (if I'm on a male avi when buying, you'll get a male item, if I'm on a female avi you'll get a female item), or nothing at all.
5) DO NOT EDIT YOUR ROLL POST. If you fail to ping me don't panic, I read the ENTIRE thread anyways.
6) * next to your name in the Hunter Post means you've rolled for that time period.
7) Hunter Post contains the information of when I last updated (when I was online last). To which post (to see if I reached you) and what time it is currently in Hawaii. It now contains which time period I'm recording for.
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I don't understand what I've done wrong. I thought I'd filled in the form correctly. I had an issue with the dice roll post, where I tried to reply to another post directly after posting the dice post and it hijacked my dice post making it looked edited, so I posted a new dice post as per someones suggestion.
Sorry to rant but this is quite upsetting actually. The game seemed simple until I got all these responses that I've filled things in wrong and I've no idea where exactly I went wrong.
I'm not going to bother playing this game. Why play a game you don't enjoy anymore? No point anyway, by the time I roll enough dice to beat the level 1 monster the event will have ended a long time ago.
Nice idea, but a let down and too strict.
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spicedroses
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11-02-2010, 09:42 AM
Hey I have updated my list.
Weathers kinda bad right now, lots of rain
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